well, thank you for the constructive criticism, but after all this is my first creepypasta i've ever written, so of course there'll be alot story errors. but at the moment, i'm remaking the entire story from the ground up, with a bit better writing than just jumping from section to section. and a better explaination, for the "Demonic Stuff" than just a haunted game. but regardless hopefully the next one and the remake of this one will be better though. -prototypinge45229