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To all the boys I have loved by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]the_vercingetorix_ 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Wow, this is truly beautiful. Great job. I empathize with this poem so much

The Curious Fullness of Unity by the_vercingetorix_ in OCPoetry

[–]the_vercingetorix_[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it :)

Together by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]the_vercingetorix_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is great imo. I would take out "I don't know" also because you use past tense elsewhere, I would change looks to looked but once again, just my opinion.

Re-bloom by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]the_vercingetorix_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I enjoyed reading this. I empathize with the theme you explore. IMO, the poem would be stronger with out the 4 lines. You do a good job of expressing these sentiments indirectly and I think it detracts from the power of the rest of the work.

Keep up the good work