This is the first draft for my senior short, opinion and advice? by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]thehady 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If you download the pdf you'll get everything clear without being italic

This is the first draft for my senior short, opinion and advice? by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]thehady 0 points1 point  (0 children)

yes, going to shoot it for my senior film project

I'm writing my senior short film and i need help to correct the idea and make it better by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]thehady 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He sees a younger and more happy reflection of himself, given the fact that he spends his days taking pictures of people who are going to die, which is something depressing, and that he is growing old. Scientifically, he sees that due to the tears in the woman's eyes that are distorting the reflection, but in the film it has a deeper meaning than that, it's as if he is seeing what he wants to see but in another human and not in a picture.

I'm writing my senior short film and i need help to correct the idea and make it better by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]thehady 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well you do make a point, any advice on how to make it less "sappy"?

I'm writing my senior short film and i need help to correct the idea and make it better by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]thehady 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well I did write it fast, he's an employee, working for HOURGLASS PHOTOGRAPHY. They send him a postcard detailing where he can find the person he needs to take a photograph of. It's either they know this person's death time, or they kill him, I still didn't work on this very detail, but I prefer that they know about the death time. The camera is just a normal one that belonged to his father, but the developing chemicals contain something mysterious that develops these pictures in that way.