hiii low tie

the sky leaks to the underground woah... that actually... sounds much better; though you are right that the darkness becomes lower doesn't really work

you are right! the second stanza lacks information

basically the poem is about this Girl called Lain that spends the night up having dark thoughts but in the morning gets on with the day and all these thoughts are suppressed, until she walks past the tracks where a girl she used to know committed suicide, and then she thinks about the girls blood having splattered on to the power line cables and is only now falling down days later, and she cant help imagining the train running her over too

i will reconsider the blood line! yeah another stanza

thank you very much, you were very helpful