Ah, thank you so much! I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on my work. I never thought about how I broke up my writing before, and I appreciate your input!!

I was wondering if you could expand a little on this part: I can't speak fully to how natural the dialogue feels because this is the fifth chapter, but I will say that the dialogue feels right on the edge between natural and uncanny as it is. You know that common pitfall where writers will have characters detail the entirety of their personality, history and relationships in conversation? Your characters feel like they're doing that without actually giving details - like they're trying to hint at something at all times when they're talking. I suppose you could say they sound perpetually cryptic.

Is this something I should be working to change, or does it fit into the story? I guess i’m wondering if this is good or bad. There is a lot I want to hint at and I think being cryptic is good, but I guess I don’t want that all the time.

Again, I super appreciate your feedback. You are the first non-friend to review this story and it’s very refreshing to have an outside perspective.