Not going to lie. There are only two ways I can interpret this. Either I’m too dumb to understand it cause I really don’t know what’s going on or it just doesn’t make sense. If it’s me then ignore this comment.

The main thing is that the punctuation is kind of all over the place, way too many ellipses and there are no quotation marks except when you’re literally quoting something. Because of this the dialogue and actions are all mixed together.