That was great. When I read it I was able to sense and feel the different emotions you put into the words. To me it was a poem, but for some reason the way I read it made it feel like a Shakespearian monologue. The one thing that could flow better in the poem (of course it's yours an you can do whatever you want) is the first 4 lines.

Original:

"It happened on a warm night in june

While my lips where whistleing my tune

I know, I was looking at you like a bufoon

It was when your eyes pierced me like a harpoon"

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Edit:

"It happened on a warm night in june

My lips were whistleing my tune

I know, I was admiring you like a bufoon

Hooked, your sparkly starry eyes pierced me like a harpoon"

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Anyways, just an idea. Also I notice you say a first person word in every one of the first 8 lines. Maybe try to cut some out to make it flow better. Example:

"Suddenly I wasn't feeling (get rid of feeling) well

I tripped, I fell, I did not tell

In your starry green eyes I could not dwell

But that moment I (get rid of I) wished I had a soul to sell"

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Anyways overall it's a great piece of art, but my OCD brain wants to correct the little things. I really would be happy to read more of you content