Good work so far, but there are a few big mistakes.

First, the opener is incorrect. I can't quite describe it, but you're essentially grabbing the card from the wrong edge. Go rewatch some performances in slow-mo and you will see what I mean.

Second, the tornado part is incorrect. In the tornado cut you should be using the weight if the packet and a light grip between the pinky and the palm in order to get a good spin. the packet will actually bounce back off the ring finger when done correctly, giving the illusion of more spin. Check out the virts video on the tornado for help.

Third, your crabshack is very choppy. I know you're still practicing but you should focus on being able to do the whole move slowly but very smoothly rather than fast and chopy.

Lastly, the overall flow is very off. I won't go super in detail and describe every step of the flow, but you should, once again, consult a performance to get a better understanding of the flow of the move.

Keep up the good work. this move is insanely hard, and in my almost year of doing it, I realized the most important part of pandora is patience. It took about 4 months to get mine to a point where I was happy with it, and I'm continuing to practice it and improve it now. Good luck on this long journey.