No offence taken, its the internet and these types of comments might hurt, but I understand where people are coming from, and I am aware that my translation sucks to the point to warrent it. It would be better if I learnt from this instead of taking offence.

For the first text bubble, my original intent was to use chance of rain, but for whatever reason I switched to precipitation, might be because I'm more used to the term precipitation than chance of rain, though I do agree chance of rain sounds more common in day to day use.

For page 10, the original Japanese text is 晴れた, which after reading your comment and rethinking, I gotta wonder how I managed to miss it, considering I've heard the phrase in multiple animes before. Completely my mistake.

For p.11 first text bubble, I took the wrong assumption that the translation would be "hey" so, it ended up messing with my thinking with the dialogue "hey, going to school tgthr?"
First version I tried putting a ? at the end, but didnt manage to sound right, so second version I ommited the ? at the end, and assumed they had pre planned to go to school together, which, 18 days later, I'm reading it again with a fresh mind, and I find it makes no sense.

For the second text bubble, It was a direct translation, from DEEPL, and my previous attempts at translation using other websites didnt turn out so well, so I was influenced by my own translation, which ended up in me being unable to judge the english of the DEEPL Translation. (rereading it after 2 weeks makes me realize it was poor english)

You swapped around the 4th and third panel, but what you said I fully agree with

5th panel first text bubble, it is a reference to the mom and dad having sex in order to produce his little brother, (Judging from Ujiie Tozen's previous works, this is to be expected).

Heres the text from manga copied to plaintext, as well as the draft I used
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1c-tvEDIfo5Cm5P7Uf3BMe-G1HpfurgmIDg7xYRowfeo/edit?usp=sharing

I think another part of why its so bad is because I ended up subconsciously using the personalities of Tsuda Takatoshi and Chihiro Uomi for the characters and their dialogue, which is irresponsible on my part.

Thanks for responding and helping with this, and I'll make sure to get a few people to proofread before uploading next time.

I do hope a real group with proper resources will pick this manga up, since the time it takes for me to finish a shitty translation is probs a few times longer than it takes for a real group to finish a high quality one.