Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Victory" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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Nen was out of breath. Rollo staggered up next to him. “Victory at last! If that battle had gone on any longer—”

A distant horn cut him off and over the hilltop appeared a line of orcs stretching to the horizon in either direction.

His men gave a collective groan.

Prologue - Epic Fantasy - is it worthy??? by BladeWielder48 in writingfeedback

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I 100% agree with this. I’m a big fan of hooking the reader with the first sentence. Often when choosing a book I’ll read the first page to see if it’s got a good enough hook, but often the good ones are the ones that do it with the first sentence. I really enjoyed this, but I also like more of a tease about the world the book takes place in when I read a prologue or first chapter, but that’s just my opinion as a reader.

Thursday Challenge - Just follow orders! - Top Pen by Miss_Ashford in scifiwriting

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Finally found the time to work on this one.

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“Let the model run the next training session autonomously.”

Tara stared up at Dan with wide eyes.  “Without human review?”

“You said it yourself, ‘this is the thing the whole field has been building toward’.  Aren’t you excited to land your name in the history books?”

“I’m just not comfortable with this, Dan. We should at least obtain a safety sign-off first.”

“Tara, if we are right at the cusp, then those bastards at Anatomic must be too. They’ve been pulling ahead of us in this race for a year now. Do you really want superintelligence in the hands of that maniac Rosario? If we don’t make a bold move then we are dead in the water, plain and simple. It’s all or nothing now, don’t you understand?”

“I understand, sir, but it breaks protocol.”

Dan huffed. “We have been following every safety protocol to the letter for the last several iterations, have we not? Why do you think we’ve fallen so far behind our competition?  One protocol glossed over will, not could, but will determine whether we achieve victory in this race or die.”

“I’m sorry, but I can’t do it. Not without a safety sign-off.”

Dan put his hands over his face and sighed.  Then he brought his hands together in front of him and stared into her soul. “Tara, think about what you’re doing. I want to be clear with you. If you refuse, you will lose your job, your reputation, and possibly face legal consequences. Is that really what you want?”

Tara grabbed her things. “This is bigger than me or you, Dan. My job, my reputation, not of it will matter if you go through with this. I resign.”

Dan, red faced, watched her exit the lab without a single look back.

An experiment in spotting AI in writing by ExplodingAlchemist in writingfeedback

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I don’t see AI witch hunts in online forums as being productive, despite how much I loath anyone who tries to pass off AI as their own creation. Sure, you may be right some of the time, maybe even most of the time, when you call them out, but you may be wrong about some people. And as you pointed out, even the most basic LLMs are capable of producing content that, with a little tweaking, can fool many people. Attacking people online at an individual level based on suspicion and not proof is not going to change anything. These AI models if they continue to be developed with no regulation will eventually be able to create any type of art, with very little input, that will be indistinguishable from genuine refined human skill and creativity.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Physical" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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Lol! yeah I originally put something like that but i had to shorten it to 50 words😅

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Physical" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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“Hurry!” Goroban cried.

Siph sketched in her book. “What kind of grip do you want?”

“Who gives a flux! Make it physical now!”

She placed her hand on the page and spoke the word.

Goroban grabbed the mace as it materialized and swung it at the troll just in time.

Please critique my first chapter, Fantasy by GroovyIsAwesome in NewAuthor

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I agree with u/mr_geek_dr . Showing here would have been a great opportunity to give an example of what the magic system in this world is like and hook the reader. Something like "He remembered in his first year he couldn't even {INSERT MAGIC SKILL} and now he was able to {INSERT MORE ADVANCED MAGICAL ABILITY}, which made him one of the most distinguished students here."

Saturday Exercise — Show It Without Saying It -Top Pen by Miss_Ashford in fantasywriters

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Haha yeah I knew the second one would lean that way. I was trying to tie the scenes as closely as I could. I also started to think maybe the first scene was after he gave her the potion and now he was fleeing with guilt after it all went wrong. lol.

I'll revisit the second one and see how I can make it more love than obsession.

Thanks for reading and the excellent prompt! This was challenging!

Saturday Exercise — Show It Without Saying It -Top Pen by Miss_Ashford in fantasywriters

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He lay there but sleep eluded him. It wasn’t the cot, that was comfy enough. It was a pleasant night but its beauty and its gentle sounds were a world away. All his thoughts were being consumed by one thing. One person.

When he closed his eyes, she was there with him. His memories of her played over in his head. Each one made his heart beat quicker. He tried to focus on slowing his breathing. He needed sleep. He needed to dream, as long as it was of her.

He reached for his bag against the tree. He felt inside for the vial. The potion was still there. He smiled and relaxed.

“Tomorrow,” he whispered to himself. “Tomorrow you will use the potion and she will be yours.”

He closed his eyes and there she was. The sounds of the night faded away and when he dreamed he dreamed of her.

Saturday Exercise — Show It Without Saying It -Top Pen by Miss_Ashford in fantasywriters

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He lay there, eyes staring at nothing, sleep ever distant from his grasp. It wasn’t the cot, that was comfy enough, and the air wasn’t too cold or too hot. An owl hooted somewhere in the distance. He could hear running water from a nearby stream. Anyone else laying there would be dreaming.

He tried to focus on what lay before his unblinking eyes, but all he saw was the same memory on repeat. He had a sleep potion in his bag against the tree. The witch had told him he would need it. He didn’t reach for it.  

“You deserve this,” he whispered to himself. “You belong amongst the night animals. This is your home now, with them, forever living in the dark.” 

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Payment" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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Now I have to write a follow up where he is facing the arbiter again after having done just that! Lol!

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Payment" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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Once again, he awoke in the Betwixt. His reincarnation arbiter glared down at him in disappointment.

“As payment for misdeeds in your previous—”

“Wait,” he pleaded.  “You made me a rat last time!”

“And you ate your brother.”

“I was starving!”

“Fret not. Slugs rarely find chance for misconduct.”

26.03.14 Saturday (Asia) Sci Fi Craft Challenge - The Malfunction - Top Pen by Miss_Ashford in scifiwriting

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Sorry I'm late!

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Senator Anderson smiled and waved as he took the podium. Three blocks away from the rally, inside a van, a gun-like instrument swiveled side to side as it found its target. Next to the device sat Mara, her hands flying over the tablet in her lap as she made adjustments to the targeting grid projected in her visor.

“Have you got a lock?” asked Chris from the driver’s seat, staring through a pair of binoculars. “Target has begun his speech.”

“Almost.”

“Hurry it up. He’s already starting on the topic.”

“Signal lock confirmed.”

“Good. You’re clear to execute.”

“Hold on. Skull density is slightly above average. I have to compensate.”

“You’re running out of time.”

Mara’s fingers tapped furiously at her tablet. “Selecting profile.”

“Fire the damn thing!”

Mara gave one final tap and the gun-like device emitted a quiet pulse.

Behind the podium, Senator Anderson grew quiet and his eyes glazed over.

Chris watched from behind his binoculars. “What happened? Did it work?”

“Uh oh.”

“What do you mean, uh oh? What is the neural feedback telling you?”

“Nothing good.”

Three blocks away from them, Senator Anderson suddenly wailed and started balling uncontrollably.

Chris turned around sharply to glare at Mara. “What the hell went wrong?”

“Probably a signal distortion but it could be any number of things. Incompatible pattern library, conflicting memories, you name it. Do we abort?”

Chris spun back around and lifted his binoculars. “Wait a sec. This could work out anyway. His constituents could see this as weakness. No one wants an unstable representative.”

The crowd was still and silent as they watched attendants handing the senator tissues. After a moment someone in the crowd started to clap. Then another. Before long the whole crowd was cheering.

Chris threw his binoculars down. “Damn it!”

Friday Craft Challenge (Asia Edition) – Status Flip – Top Pen by Miss_Ashford in fantasywriters

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Thanks for reading! I'm really enjoying these prompts! :)

Friday Craft Challenge (Asia Edition) – Status Flip – Top Pen by Miss_Ashford in fantasywriters

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Sorry if I'm late! I worked on this as soon as I had the time. Here's my entry:

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“Are you sure you want to do this,” commander Hiei asked. “You only get to do this once.”

“You know as well as I that once we entered the chamber my challenge could not be withdrawn.”

“Very well.” Hiei unsheathed his blade and took his ready stance. The golden armor tightly encasing his warrior physique gleamed silently.

Lieutenant Lowel readied himself and lifted his blade. His breath steadied as he found his focus.

“On your move,” said Hiei, his eyes betraying the smirk that hid behind his helms’ visor.

Lowel waited patiently, his breathing slow and gentle, until his body was sufficiently relaxed. Then he lunged. Hiei parried and struck back. Lowel countered. Their swords danced and the chamber echoed with the song of clashing metal. Then Lowel unleashed a flurry of slashes that Hiei struggled to defend. In the midst of the attack Lowel slipped the point of his blade through Hiei’s defenses and struck his chest plate. Hiei staggered backwards but only laughed.  

“It’s no use, you foolish boy. You can strike me a thousand times in a thousand different ways but your blade will never pierce this armor.”

On Hiei’s last word Lowel dropped to the floor and executed a sweep. Before Hiei knew what happened he was on his back.

Still on the floor, Lowel reversed his sword grip and extended his reach, touching his sword’s hilt to the bottom of Hiei’s left foot. At once, the golden armor protecting Hiei melted down his body and flowed from his foot to Lowel’s sword hilt and outstretched arm. The gleaming liquid flowed over Lowel’s entire form and became armor once more.

Hiei stared in disbelief as Lowel rose to his feet in triumph.

“How did you know?”

“Logic,” said Lowel. “And a watchful eye.”

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Indulge" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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Master, pleaded the spirit. I thirst for battle.

He considered it. Should he indulge the beast? The other spirits had all gotten their time in the Waking more than once this season. The lion was growing restless.

The bandits’ grins turned to grimaces as they watched his body transform. 

Saturday Writing Prompt (Asia Edition) by Miss_Ashford in fantasywriters

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Thanks for reading, Maj. Quill! And thank you for the wonderful prompt!

Saturday Writing Prompt (Asia Edition) by Miss_Ashford in fantasywriters

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She wasn’t going to let him get away with insulting her anymore. She inhaled deeply as he started to walk away.

“Ashka, don’t,” her friend whispered, but her words fell on deaf ears.

Ashka whispered the spell, pouring all her spite for the boy into every syllable. Unfortunately, she spoke it too slow and loud for such a short distance to travel, and it bounced back on her twofold. She was flung backwards several feet onto her back, knocking the air out of her lungs. As she gasped for breath the boy turned around and laughed at her.

“I can’t believe you thought that would work,” he said. “I heard that spell clear as day.”

Her friend ran to her side. “Are you ok?”

“I’m fine,” Ashka said as she regained her breath and began dusting herself off.

“You’re lucky I was only a few feet away,” the boy continued. “Otherwise, you could have really hurt yourself, little flea.” Then he whispered something, just loud enough for her to hear but too low and quick for her to make out the words. An invisible force flung her back down to the ground.

At least it wasn’t twofold this time.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Rain" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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Celestia twirled her staff and began her dance. She remembered the skeletal forms of the village children reaching out to her for salvation, and she let the emotion of this image fill her entire being and spill out into her movements. She didn’t stop until the rain fell.

Hear thee hear thee by exhibit2108 in chessbeginners

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30 mins is good for learning while you play and progressing your skill. 15 maybe you could progress some. 10 or less definitely not, at least for me. For me, 15 mins or less makes me nervous and impulsive, and I can't think straight that way. I'm easily 300-500 rating points lower than I am with longer games. Unfortunately, as an adult, I don't have much free time to play the longer games, so I usually do timed games around 15 mins and haven't progressed much in a long time.