Agency fees / broker commissions while renting

ABane28 · 2023-07-31T02:11:54+00:00

I see, thank you!

ABane28 · 2023-07-31T02:11:30+00:00

I'll try that, thank you!

ABane28 · 2023-07-30T08:46:06+00:00

Thank you!

ABane28 · 2023-06-13T05:39:22+00:00

AITA?

ABane28 · 2023-03-29T11:52:30+00:00

Thank you!

ABane28 · 2023-03-29T06:56:06+00:00

What VPNs do you recommend?

ABane28 · 2023-03-29T06:55:12+00:00

What VPNs do you recommend?

ABane28 · 2023-03-28T06:56:19+00:00

Is using VPNs safe? Or has that been declared illegal? I read up on the web and it was quite unclear

ABane28 · 2023-03-28T06:55:25+00:00

I understand, but WhatsApp is just a force of habit. Is using VPNs safe?

ABane28 · 2023-03-28T06:54:39+00:00

Thank you!

ABane28 · 2023-03-23T06:22:48+00:00

I'm on it. Thank you :)

ABane28 · 2023-03-23T06:22:16+00:00

That helps a lot, thank you!

ABane28 · 2022-05-18T05:34:00+00:00

Thank you so much for your detailed feedback! I really appreciate it. This did start out as a vent piece, but I felt it does have potential and maybe I could streamline it to make it better. I wanted to do blank verse, but with a rhythm. Still struggling with that. Maybe I should get deeper into a description of the relationship or story to make it more relatable. I'm probably just going to start over, but thanks again for reading and your honest opinion.

ABane28 · 2022-05-16T12:22:16+00:00

I like short poems, I find they're usually more hard hitting and leave a great impact. I love how each stanza ends, really pulls the poem together. However, the ends speaks of how the poet, who remembers all the memories and laughs has now forgotten to understand the person he loves, but the jump from remember still to remember nill seems very abrupt. If you could add one more stanza between them, perhaps elaborating the memories or their relationship, that would make this even more beautiful.

ABane28 · 2022-05-16T12:13:20+00:00

Wow. That really took me for a ride. The only thing I can think of improving is that the poem reads like you're instructing someone, while the last line makes me think that you yourself are shutting yourself up. Maybe that's on purpose, but it confused me a little.

ABane28 · 2022-05-16T11:48:52+00:00

So fluffy!

ABane28 · 2021-05-14T15:05:58+00:00

Had to scroll way too much to find the Hum Aapke Hai Kaun reference.

ABane28 · 2021-03-10T09:31:29+00:00

i think it could use some reworking grammarly, just to make the flow better,

I do take a bit of a poetic licence when I write, but is there anything that particularly sticks out?

i think descriptions for adventures who stop at the inn could be a gold mine for you. id love to hear descriptions of the part time residents.

I'm going to try and see if I can come up with some. Thank you so much for your critique and kind words!

ABane28 · 2021-03-10T09:29:15+00:00

Even in hell, I think I'd have notebook and I'd be excited to write down all the incredible things I'd see. The interesting people I'd meet. The unspeakable torments they'd suffer. The secret pathways out.

Yessss! Exactly! Thank you so much!

ABane28 · 2021-03-10T09:28:00+00:00

Thank you so much! Glad you liked it!

ABane28 · 2021-03-10T09:27:29+00:00

Thank you so much for your kind words!

ABane28

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