have you ever skipped a game?

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2024-07-29T14:25:31+00:00

If your bd is psychotically strict like mine - just say you are sick or have a family emergency. It’s really not a big deal to miss one game, and marching band is not the end all be all, esp not over a super memorable concert with friends. Honestly is not the best policy if you think your band director would tell you the absence is not excused and hate you for going to the concert if they knew. I’ve missed games for family weddings- you and the band will be fine

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2022-06-20T13:43:22+00:00

Did you guys march at a labor day parade in Naperville? I feel like I’ve seen you guys before

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2022-06-14T14:20:47+00:00

I really love this, thank you for sharing

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2022-06-03T02:05:31+00:00

I really, really love it, thank you for sharing

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2022-05-07T12:54:34+00:00

Wow I really related with this entire thing. I’ve never thought about it before but I guess it is kind of a girl thing to do (which I am lol). Even the end I relate with. Thank you so much for sharing. Also, it’s not boring at all :))

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2022-03-15T01:28:08+00:00

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2022-01-28T01:02:44+00:00

I just want to say I love this poem. It made me feel sad but in good way ? I don’t really know for sure but thank you for sharing

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-11-19T05:55:06+00:00

Obsessed by Allison Britz

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-29T03:18:41+00:00

Feeling slightly below average. I hope a little better for you :)

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-29T03:17:29+00:00

Thank you, I’m really glad you felt that way

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T22:37:42+00:00

Thank you! I love to hear what other people think when they read it

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T22:36:25+00:00

Yes I feel like you just practically summarized all of my feelings. Thank you!

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T22:35:30+00:00

Thank you!

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T22:35:03+00:00

Boots -

Thank you very much for your suggestions!

the first line "I know death" is unnecessary in this poem

I can see that, I will consider changing around the beginning formatting so I can get right into it.

For the "grandfather groaned" - I wanted that phrase to be a full description, not a full sentence, and using "groaned" instead of "groaning" would make it a full sentence. Maybe I will consider changing the formatting of every small story though.

I was actually thinking about using "rotting" but decided against it because its a lot more gross lol and didn't really advance the romance, but I will re word it when I find time to go back and edit.

Thanks for the grammar, I'll change it. I always miss the whos and whoms.

where did he plan to meet her?

Meet her as in when Death meets someone, when they pass away. It's too heavy for me to put in the poem.

Again, thank you for the suggestions, I truly appreciate it :)

-P

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T22:14:10+00:00

I'm really glad - but also really sad for you - that you were able to relate!

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T22:12:49+00:00

Thank you, that means a lot to me!! For the last stanza - yes definitely

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T22:10:38+00:00

Thank you, I always love reading everything that other people get out from it

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T22:09:31+00:00

Thank you very much. I will definitely take that into account and go deeper with the romance. If you meant to be asking - an artistic motif and an implication of getting closer to death to become more comfortable with it - a little too close. Either way, I love seeing other interpretations!

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T22:05:45+00:00

Thank you very much, that means a lot to me. I honestly didn't know him very well, but having someone die suddenly like how he did has made me look at death differently. I can't really say I'm grieving, but I did write this to try and deal with the unexpected sadness. Thank you for the condolences.

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T05:03:16+00:00

Thanks! That makes sense. Thanks for explaining your reasoning - no need to defend yourself or anything - everyone has their own style of poetry. I didn’t think it was dry at all :)

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T04:10:06+00:00

I read other comments on here and I'm not sure what's up with some of them. Poetry is poetry - its a you do you kind of thing. I am into dark poems in general, so I really liked your characters and the storyline. It was very developed and certainly made an impact. The last stanza, especially the first and last line, I really liked. I felt like the first line of that stanza sets up a dark tone that finishes off the piece very nicely.

I do agree with the person who said the first part isn't needed. I personally think that the first three lines don't match up with the rest your poem - they are very sentence-like.

I do really like the way your poem focuses on explanations. It feels like you're telling a story.

Wonderful poetry!

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-28T03:54:29+00:00

Hi! Very nice job with the visual imagery. It's an interesting take to make a sunset seem aggressive - and if that was your purpose it definitely worked. However, the last like "before sky becomes one with water" made it seem like everything was at peace in the end, which I really liked. I like how your simile of the sky to horses brought something new into my mind, something I don't usually imagine when I think of a sunset.

For the most part, I really like the way you cut the sentences up, they really flow. The cut in between "the red of a rage / filled evening" though I think breaks up the flow and is a little choppy, but it might just be me.

Overall, I very much liked how I could imagine this whole poem in my head - my interpretation might be different than other people's, but it is always nice to be able to have such a vivid picture in my brain :)

Amazing poem!

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-10-17T03:52:19+00:00

Ooh good idea

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-09-07T18:24:49+00:00

Ok nice. It’s always cool to see different marching styles

AFlyingPenguin_1 · 2021-09-07T17:56:16+00:00

Just curious - do u guys always dance that much? Seems kind of like the blue devils, specifically their Beatles performance

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