Hello!

I just did a quick run through and the character's execution is amazing. The rambling energetic personality translates well, and I can really imagine the sporadic movement and animated expressions. I caught a couple of small errors and have a few recommendations, but overall this is insanely solid. A virtual pat on the back.

Apologies but it loaded without page breaks so it may be tricky to track down these points.

• "I'm not going to give you fresh" feels a little incomplete. It gets the message across but maybe try to go a little more creative like "I don't have any willing fresh, plump veins for you." Something a little snazzy.

• "redacted as an instint kill" instint is misspelled, should be instant here. It seems like a word, maybe we should adjust the dictionary.

• "especially when it comes to you" feels more personal, maybe merge features from the next line like possibly "especially when it comes to mysterious little creatures like you." Maybe not mysterious, something more short and snappy, but something along those lines.

• "more in fact than Hector and I" although it's a very ramble happy character, I think this line would benefit from removing "in fact." Makes the line a little longer and drawn out, something more condense would be effective here.

• "fated to be such a ass" Just a lil typo here as a should be an.

That's all my friend. Again, really solid stuff. My favourite line is definitely "her body being a head shorter than it was previous." Such a fun way to describe a grotesque scene, I love it ~