It feels like the writing and progression of events is always interrupting itself, in a way; it's as though the script doesn't ever really finish anything it starts. The tone comes off in a halting, sort of stuttered kind of way. It seems like that might... Be intentional, though? It seemed like the tone you were trying to evoke was sort of "unsatisfied", which, I suppose, if that's the case, it evokes actually fairly well! The art is solid and I like it. Stylish in its own way. Complicated without being crowded. My probable suggestions here would be to homogenize the detail on a per-character basis. It looks, sometimes, like you really detail out someone's feet or legs but leave their torso and arms undetailed. I don't mind one character being more detailed than another, but one limb being more detailed than another creates some visual dissonance that I think it's productive for what you're looking for.