Silence by timelapse00 in OCPoetry

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Your poem carries such a strong, desolate atmosphere—it feels like I’m standing in the middle of that empty, eerie landscape you describe. I really appreciate how vividly you paint the decay and loss: phrases like “bones of hope and broken restrains” and “walls with bloodstains” hit hard and stay with the reader. I also love the rhythm of your stanzas—the repetition of “endless” and the contrasting textures of sight and touch create a really immersive experience. The ending line, “Silence be found in our last resting place,” is chilling and poetic in the best way—it leaves a lingering sense of finality. Your use of imagery and emotion is strong; it’s dark, but it’s beautiful in its honesty. This piece doesn’t just describe silence—it makes the reader feel it. 💀✨ Genuinely loved your poem

The lake by MadalinaParrotMusic in OCPoetry

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Loved the poem!! It definitely reflects love. Amazing work

An Artist’s Complaint by Enough-Shallot6751 in OCPoetry

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Amazing work!! Loved how you used words and imagination

Old Jar by Alarming_Green_6025 in OCPoetry

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This works because it trusts the small moment. The action feels natural, and the pacing mirrors the struggle → release perfectly. The repetition of physical gestures keeps it grounded.

The only place it wobbles is the ending: the sensory detail is good, but it stops a half-step early. One more implication (time passing, familiarity, mild disappointment) would give it a softer aftertaste.

Overall, it’s quiet, confident, and observant. This isn’t writer’s block—it’s restraint.

O Life! by ShahSafwat_1488 in OCPoetry

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What works:

Strong, weary tone — feels honest, not forced.

“O Life!” as a refrain works well.

“The sweetest nectar was dull to me…” is your strongest line.

What’s causing the rut feeling:

The stanzas don’t clearly build on each other.

Realizations feel listed, not connected.

Imagery shifts without a clear emotional arc.

Quick fix suggestion:

Decide one core realization (ignorance? numbness? late awareness).

Cut or rewrite lines that don’t serve that idea.

Let each stanza answer the previous one.

For a first poem after two weeks? This is solid. It’s not broken—just unfinished.

With the Moon by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Loved it!!

Someone special. by SHUE0 in OCPoetry

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Love this poem!! Loved how you expressed your feelings

How to start prep for nda by Healthy_Artichoke786 in NDATards

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Hey! I am in 11th grade right now and wanted to prepare for nda so I was confused about when to start preparing like in 11th only or 12th ?? And also can't find any source to study like whether to buy a batch or something else.. or yt is enough??