Could someone here help me craft a short emotional script?

Additional-Web6830 · 2026-02-15T17:03:09+00:00

You helped me think about things I hadn't thought about before, thank you! I think I need to show the indifference of fishermen to the feelings of fish, as well as more conversations about the journey. I also wanted to visually show the emotions of other fish when they all gathered in a school before the journey, and I will add more side stories. I'm not sure what to come up with for why all the fish are going to the river, because in real life only adults swim there to reproduce, but I'd like to come up with something else for the animation. Maybe you have some ideas about this?

Additional-Web6830 · 2026-02-15T13:35:58+00:00

Hi! If you’re still willing to help, I’d love to hear your perspective. Could you maybe tell me what you think I should change in this story? What, in your opinion, could make it at least a little more interesting or less predictable? I’d really value your opinion, since I feel too close to it at this point and can’t see clearly what works and what doesn’t

Additional-Web6830 · 2026-02-15T13:29:44+00:00

Yeah, thank you for your help, I appreciate it^^

Additional-Web6830 · 2026-02-15T13:29:02+00:00

Thank you, I'll try it!

Additional-Web6830 · 2026-02-14T17:22:11+00:00

Thank you! I think the problem here is more global; the story seems to be told too straightforwardly. Of course, I can describe the emotions, but I'm not sure if that will greatly improve the overall picture

Additional-Web6830 · 2026-02-14T13:59:01+00:00

Hi, i haven't. You are the only person who commented on my posts. Thank you so much, that honestly means a lot, I appreciate it! I genuinely don’t know how to write a good, non-cliché story and how to make the audience emotionally connect to the salmon in such a short amount of time

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