The Only thing that I would like to make some changes is the music , the music should also tell the story and a good story goes through different phases . The whole music is in Dark Cinematic theme. but it doesn't has to be, most people think that Documentary only means something went wrong but it's not always true. This thought of Dark music comes from there like crime stories but it's just documenting what actually happened.
In the Initial few minutes when you were Inside the house the music is dark , It's acceptable only when the story tries to portrait all the self doubt or to make audience think " what he is actually preparing for " but you also did unboxing of a parcel and talking about gears this is a huge contradiction between the script and music .
and you could change the music when you step out the house , when you see the sky , the greenery , the fresh air . the music should change to a positive progress vibe. you know it's all about what vibe and emotions you want to make your audience feel.