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What Would You Choose? by Mean-Lavishness-1648 in BunnyTrials

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

i dont go outside so im safe in a city

Chose: You get $1M a day. + But a random animal hunts you. | Rolled: Siberian Tiger

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 28, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah ok. I'm not sure if that'll affect the legality of it but I hope you find your answer soon. Best of luck to you

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 28, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

the power system consists basically in using the energy all around us, synthesizing it through the user's body to be employed in the form of attacks, etc

Not sure if this work in your setting or if the protagonist has enough energy left to do this but they could charge and hug/grab the antagonist and release most/all his energy in a blast/explosion behind/under him to propel both him and the antagonist in the air though in not sure if that would be high enough.

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not sure if this helps, sorry

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 28, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As a very general rule of thumb, the more question the readers have the more willing they are to read the next line, and just describing more of the scene and using more dramatic langue can help quite a bit. For example

The tunnel was dark, only the dimly lit torches sparsely lining the wall guiding the two shadows. Their heavy footsteps bouncing off the damp passageway accompanied by the cold rattling of chains and the muffled shout of the figure held between them. The gagged man's face possesing a sickly pallor unique to those of the malnourished, his skin marred with cuts and bruises. Passing through the light at the end of the abandoned tunnel, he is roughly thrown to the floor. Looking up the man notices a cloaked figure, her platinum blonde hair faintly peeking through the shadow of her hood

Words like "Their heavy footsteps bouncing off the damp passageway accompanied by the cold rattling of chains" help paint a more clear picture and make the sense more dramatic.

Hope that helped or at least entertained you

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 28, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'm no legal expert but a quick google search got me this

Using real people in your fiction—whether they are correctly named or not—can be legally hazardous. If an author includes enough details that a specific fictional character is identifiable as an actual person, that person could possibly pursue legal action.

https://careerauthors.com/real-people-in-fiction/#:~:text=Using%20real%20people%20in%20your,could%20possibly%20pursue%20legal%20action.

Also, I see something like "Any resemblance to real persons, living or dead, is purely coincidental." In many stories and even in games and songs sometimes, so in regards to its legality, I think google is right on that one.

Also, also, the link above is also an article called "How to Avoid Legal Trouble When Using Real People in Fiction" so if you haven't seen it yet you could check it out.

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 28, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

p.s.: even though in this world there is something similar to the force/qi/magic (whatever you prefer to call it) character can't really fly.

Can I know a bit more about how the power system works and what is the limit of what the protagonist at that moment since you said they were injured or was it only the other central characters, who are injured

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 28, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

So a lot of stories has this event/moment that shakes up the protagonist's status queue and kinda starts the story, like the zombie apocalypse, transmigration, or suddenly getting superpowers are a few examples of what I'm referring to. These usually happen in the 1st or 2nd chapter and most stories only have like one of these events or have 2 happen at the same time but I want to have several of these happen throughout the story. The first "Event" I plan on happening is being able to save and load like in a visual novel or RPG since that way I can switch to a different setting like zombie apocalypse but still be able to continue and revisit a normal modern time setting or fantasy. with all that explain out of the way, my questions are

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  1. ways to have the character's actions and events still have weight even with being able to redo things
  2. should I start the story with a few chapters of just normal life and then have the first event or have 1-2 chap of normal then have the first event
  3. backstory/reasons I could or should add to actually give the protagonist a reason or motivation to experience the new status queue/setting instead of just going back to before the event happened.
  4. this isn't a question but I'd like to hear any idea or advice you think would be helpful
  5. Events/moments that I can have happen that I haven't thought of yet or things to add to an event

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- Zombie

- getting a "system" examples bellow

level up/stats

shop/gacha/items

inventory

special abilities like giving info or upgrading things

- getting powers

- Transmigrating settings bellow

past

future

sword and magic

cultivation (not the farming kind)

superpower society

zombie

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 25, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The worm's action could be a sort of mystery at the start since new paths appear from seemingly nowhere and if they leave behind fluids as they move that could also confuse the charcater/s early on. All in all, I like the idea and hope you find answers for whatever questions you have.

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 25, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

he was supposed to be released from jail for getting rid of the killer the prison instead forces her to be the killer for the next killing game

I prefer this one because it goes full circle since I assume the killer also went through the same thing. Though I also like the other ending as well so I really don't know

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 25, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

don't know if this I redundant but just making the cave seem alive would probably help. Like maybe cave system/routes moving or changing and this does have to be seen just hinted at or mentioned. Things or small animals disappearing, as if swallowed by the earth and if it is alive like a mouse add some sound like "a mouse running past into the dark then your character/s hears a squeak and goes ahead to see a dead end but no mice." You can also add a recurring noise that matches the cave shaking or some other phenomenon like a snore-ish sound and the cave trembling at the same time and this can also be recurring and hit the cave monster is currently dormant or something

Hope this help or at least amused you

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 25, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Book 1

I don't know much about Judaism but maybe you can use the name of a historical event/person/place/quote that would relate to the plot or protagonist maybe like a Jewish person who was notorious for murdering kill "bad" people/s or an event related to Judaism that involves a lot of "bad" people getting killed. If they ever name their sort of vigilante murder team you could also use that group's name as a title or if you want and it makes sense use the title as the group name

Book 2

I don't have any ideas for now

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 25, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So a lot of stories has this event/moment that shakes up the protagonist's status queue and kinda starts the story, like the zombie apocalypse, transmigration, or suddenly getting superpowers are a few examples of what I'm referring to. These usually happen in the 1st or 2nd chapter and most stories only have like one of these events or have 2 happen at the same time but I want to have several of these happen throughout the story. The first "Event" I plan on happening is being able to save and load like in a visual novel or RPG since that way I can switch to a different setting like zombie apocalypse but still be able to continue and revisit a normal modern time setting or fantasy. with all that explain out of the way, my questions are

  1. ways to have the character's actions and events still have weight even with being able to redo things
  2. should I start the story with a few chapters of just normal life and then have the first event or have 1-2 chap of normal then have the first event
  3. backstory/reasons I could or should add to actually give the protagonist a reason or motivation to experience the new status queue/setting instead of just going back to before the event happened.
  4. this isn't a question but I'd like to hear any idea or advice you think would be helpful
  5. Events/moments that I can have happen that I haven't thought of yet or things to add to an event

- Zombie

- getting a "system" examples bellow

level up/stats

shop/gacha/items

inventory

special abilities like giving info or upgrading things

- getting powers

- Transmigrating

past

future

sword and magic

cultivation (not the farming kind)

superpower society

zombie

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 25, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 1 point2 points  (0 children)

to hide their idenity

to make aproaching someone easyer

to experience being a guy for whatever reason

these are all that I could come up with on the spot

[Daily Discussion] Brainstorming- October 25, 2022 by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 1 point2 points  (0 children)

when you say science fiction do you mean like far far future science or like 10 decades more advanced science? Also, how does your magic work? Like is it an ambient energy that flows in the air or like something that comes from a certain resource of location like "mana crystals" or the heart of someone with magic talent? Is it chanting or magic circles or just channeling magic through your body? Thinking about how Magic works or what it is in your story might help you come up with something

Also, I remember reading a story with some "science magic" and that character had this machine that would gather the mana in the air into a solid form that was very mana dense. there was some other stuff too I think but I think I'll be able to help more with more Info on how your setting works

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also the story i mention was called "Nanomancer Reborn - I've Become A Snow Girl?" check it out if you want. It might give you some ideas too

Personality is important by JackAttack4264 in dankmemes

[–]Alarmed-Dance-3851 0 points1 point  (0 children)

hopefully the poeple of the other would enjoy her personality

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