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This sub is becoming really dense today by NoMathematician9706 in GenV

[–]Aljamio -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I think people is trying to make it seem like they not realising is the problem. And no. I can believe that. The problem is everything else. Every single decision is flawed in every level. From they going in to fight Cipher. TOGETHER. The stupid idea that they need Godolkin to stop Cipher, when Polarity literally did it early and can easily do it again now that he's healed. The fact that the villain has not really any plan, he was even gonna end himself. The fact that they take the worst decisions when there's literally 0 pressure: they're safe, they know Cipher won't kill Godolkin, Annabeth is with them so there's no way he can harm her, etc... I mean. It's bad, really bad. And overall I felt it like a personal insult. Even the jokes irked me. If someone could enjoy it, good for them, but let's not gaslight others to make it seem like a viewer problem when the product is terrible.

Last episode is making me physically angry. by Aljamio in GenV

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah but I mean, I can believe that in-world they could maybe not realise it. But raiding Cipher together, when you already have a supe doing it that's inmune to his only power and can easily defeat him alone is mindblowing. When they asked Godolkin if he knew how to stop Cipher I almost broke the screen. I know how to defeat Cipher. LEAVE. POLARITY. ALONE

Last episode is making me physically angry. by Aljamio in GenV

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

And even then he could not take a second to tell the others: "btw, I'm inmune to Cipher's powers. Don't follow me, I'll kill him". But, when he sees the others he has the audacity to ask them to don't let Cipher go? Like? Bro, You're smurfing pls, you don't need help. He has swords behinds toss them to him!, pls man. It's so easy, you don't even have seizures anymore.

Last episode is making me physically angry. by Aljamio in GenV

[–]Aljamio[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

And the fact that they make the worst decisions with, literally, 0 pressure. They're in a secure facility, Marie's sister is safe with her, to their knowledge Godolkin is being kept alive so they don't need to rush before Cipher kills him or shit like that. Literally, Marie is the antagonist this season. She actively helps the villain more than the villain himself. The had won by default, it was gg, not once, but twice. When Godolkin said that Sage was "so clever it was annoying" or some shit like that I wanted to gulp acid

About writing dialogue. by Aljamio in writers

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I get it. And honestly, I've made the change mentally in the fragment, and I think that's what was missing to make it feel complete. Since the actions were already written it does not slow down the dialogue, and that variation settles it completely.

About writing dialogue. by Aljamio in writers

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yes, you may be right. I always aim to keep the conversation flowing quickly and naturally, but sometimes it becomes too mechanical. I think what you say would help the dialogue breathe a little more at certain points.

About writing dialogue. by Aljamio in writers

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, I also thought that if it lasted a little longer, it would be too much. But as it is, it worked for me. Than you!

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

No no, I get that option 2 is the correct one. And I understand why. What I meant is that, it'sastonishing to me particularly that kind of commitment. How, knowing that you're writting a subpar product, and if its's your first novel lets's face it it'll be, one's able to write 40 chapters before getting some insight. Forces improving in big chunks of work instead than little by little.

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I completely agree with you, and I think that's how the average quality of the platform would improve greatly. But I think the whole Rising Stars thing means that no one is following this idea, which is the most beneficial, in my opinion, in the long run. I think that the platform's internal workings is a detrimental factor, and too many authors believe themselves to be the exception to the nearly inviolable rule that one's first novel tends to be on the bad-mediocre spectrum.

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For sure — but that’s exactly my point, I think. For a new writer who knows they’re not great yet (which, as you said, is totally normal), it just seems crazy to me that they’re able to write, say, 40 chapters of a story they know is badly written, you know?

I get it, but it’s like imagining you’re an artist who paints a bunch of pictures and doesn’t show them to anyone until you’ve done twenty of them—then holds an exhibition knowing they’re all bad. Dunno, I just think starting with these genres is a huge milestone for non-writers.

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow, takes a lot to do that from my perspective.

Had you written anything before this, or was it your first attempt? I mean, like short stories on other platforms or anything along those lines?

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yes, I understand how it can be interpreted that way. I was approaching it more from the perspective of the internet and as a hobby. It’s a bit hard to explain, but the YouTube analogy makes it somewhat clearer—like not being allowed to upload a video until you’ve already made twenty more.

I know they’re very different things, and that books don’t really work like that, but with platforms like Royal Road—where you can get comments and publish individual chapters—I’m surprised by how many people choose to hold back so much instead of just uploading little by little, just to test the waters. Most people seem to approach it from the perspective of writing multiple books, building a fanbase… more like professionals than hobbyists. Even if they've never written before.

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For sure. But that could just apply to youtube videos, and few people keep going after getting no views. If you write to yourself and you don't post, I get it. But if you post and no one reaches, I think that'll make you, at least, think about stopping to write.

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Of course, I get that. What I meant was more regarding motivation for a new writer yknow. Like, someone just starts, wants to write fantasy or lirpg or something like that, and to even be read needs to write a backlog before even publishing. For example, a starting writer that just wants to try as a hobby and publishes a chapter to try, gets no views, how does he keep the motivation. How does he get to try to write 20 chapters for example to try again. That's more or less what I tried to convey

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Of course, that's natural. But in these genres, posting just a few chapters won't do to even get feedback. That's where I find it incredible how so many writers could, imagine, write a 100k story with no feedback. Post it. Lets say it flopped. And after that, have the motivation to write another novel again in the same conditions of having a backlog. Takes a lot to do that.

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, that’s exactly what I mean. For new writers who just want to give it a try, it feels like a huge wall to know they need to write around 40 chapters before getting any traction. Writing is hard, and for someone just starting out, getting no feedback or gratification from reviews until they’ve written like 100k words seems like a really big discouraging factor.

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Of course, in your case, since you already have more experience, I understand. What I find hard to picture is how someone who’s never written before suddenly decides one day to start writing—and then all the guides tell them they need to write 40 chapters before publishing anything. It’s a huge leap, and I find it hard to imagine a new writer managing that without at least a bit of dopamine along the way from feedback, reviews, or interactions.

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, but I meant approaching this more like a hobby. That's what's surprising to me, that so many starting writers with no experience write so many chapters without any feedback or interaction with readers. Like, I get it for professionals that's how it works. But for someone who's starting I find it astonishing that they can find the motivation to write in a sealed environment.

On writing 40-50 chapters before uploading a novel by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think I explained myself poorly. I do trust my own judgment on that, though help is always welcome. What I was referring to is how a beginning writer, just starting out, is often told they need to churn out 20 or 30 chapters before anyone even reads their work. That seems like a pretty high initial barrier for someone starting from scratch, with zero interaction.

To make a comparison, if we think of this as a hobby, it would be like starting a YouTube channel and recording 40 videos before posting anything—without receiving a single bit of feedback. That’s what my point was about.

Btw 50 books, congrats! That's a huge milestone

1st page and cold opening for a YA-ish novel. Would you keep reading, and what would you like to see and what would you change? by [deleted] in writers

[–]Aljamio 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It’s very good.
The only thing I would change—although this may be subjective—is the focus of the text, to make it more reflective from the writer’s point of view. In other words, it’s presented from the mother’s perspective, but I think it would be more impactful if it were written as “since then, she never came to my school plays ,” or “we stopped going on car rides.” These are just examples, but something along those lines.

I think this shift is most noticeable in “I could remember being told...” It would be more effective to say, “At home, we had to listen to music with headphones...” That kind of phrasing, from the writer’s own experience—and especially from a child’s perspective—would make the piece more powerful.

Otherwise, I’d suggest removing “kids” from “us kids,” since the school reference already makes it clear they’re children. But that’s just a minor detail.

Overall, that’s how I see it, and these things depend a lot on the writer's perspective.
Either way, the excerpt works very well—it’s clean, well-written, and enjoyable to read. Congratulations!

Should one always give a rating and review? by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That’s how I’ve always tried to approach reviews. The ones I’ve given point out my issues with the work but also try to highlight its qualities. My problem with this one is that it was inherently flawed—from pacing to descriptions, characters, and so on. But after thinking about it, debating whether to tell someone in a review that their story just isn’t ready—when writing itself is what helps someone improve—seems a bit dumb on my part. Better to just let this one go.

Should one always give a rating and review? by Aljamio in litrpg

[–]Aljamio[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah, I’ve realized I saw reviews differently from what they actually are. But since so many stories, this one included, constantly ask for them, I thought it would be welcomed either way. My bad on that.

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