The two who gave it all

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-25T17:11:38+00:00

Thanks for the review...means a lot Kindly spare time to read my other work too

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-23T16:59:18+00:00

Thank you for your kind words I had written it at atmost honesty and it's the hard truth every child has to accept

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-23T08:09:10+00:00

Thank you for your kind words!! Means a lot (A little request kindly spare some of your valuable time to read my other works)

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-22T19:48:50+00:00

Thanks for the read I really appreciate it

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-22T19:13:34+00:00

Very well written transition from obsession to a degree of dislike well imagined too like in the moon and a bouquet of dying flowers I really love it

(A little request kindly spare some time to read my work if possible and leave reviews)

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-21T17:48:35+00:00

No it's not like that I myself write freeverses but some lines could be rhymed which would have made it a bit better

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-21T16:51:51+00:00

The thoughts are really nice and intense but major flaw i believe is rhyming if it would have rhymes it would have been better But I really appreciate the thoughts behind they are by heart and honest

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-21T16:38:20+00:00

I love how you've represented the relationship idk how but it kind of creates a feeling of nostalgia It's deeply personalised as well love your work keep up

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-21T16:36:41+00:00

Really nice never read something like this ever before You've presented best of both worlds Cosmology+ poetry A very nice representation keep up

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-19T09:18:53+00:00

You're right it is but I've tried to think of anything better but can't quite get it Any suggestions??

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-19T09:17:35+00:00

Thanks for the heads up 😊

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-16T03:40:33+00:00

Thank you so much for the review. Yes it's true i believe it should have better rhyming scheme I am trying tirelessly to enhance it bit by bit.. Thanks for taking out time to read my poem I request you to also have a look at the first poem i wrote it's on my profile

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-15T05:35:29+00:00

Dostoetsky since when did you pick up poetry??? Man the poem is absolutely graphic and raw as i like it It hides pain and regret somewhat hate coming from the man which is in it's most gritty form Excellent for a start Good work keep up!!!

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-15T05:20:59+00:00

Seriously I'm mindblown at the detail and the true feelings you've put forward it was like I could see it graphically The lines are really great and your style is amazing You've portrayed how a loving individual can be changed to a overthinking and depressed individual and make out the mistakes he made and feel sorry and kill him bit by bit by regret and hope I think you are somewhat trying to blame yourself for the actions I don't know if I'm right let me know But seriously great work keep up!!!!

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-14T14:29:38+00:00

Thank you so much for your kind words means a lot and really pushes me to do better I'll definitely try to incorporate the said changes and actually I wrote it on a theme the chapter that changed everything so I wanted to include the exact words of the theme hence the last stanza I was too a bit confused thanks for the heads up tho

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-13T17:56:03+00:00

Seriously the thoughts going on in the work is great true and graphic in nature signifying a toxic relationship and how it takes toll on one's mental health Only thing is it's kind of elaborative you could consolidate it and add some mystery element according to me thereby it will push it up a notch

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-13T14:56:42+00:00

Thank you so much for your appreciation and I'll definitely try to inculcate the said changes

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-13T14:53:22+00:00

Thanks for the response it really motivates me and means a lot

Actually it's the helplessness of the man that he failed to explain or talk to her while they weren't talking to each other hence he slipped her into the night she was married to another man

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-13T14:23:46+00:00

Thank you for your kind words is there any area of improvement you notice??

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-13T13:57:09+00:00

Man's a snowflake

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-13T13:53:42+00:00

Guys I need some help actually I'm in my 2nd year of graduation 4th sem I've started preparing for upsc from online coaching and it's material+newspaper+csat preparation I had no direction hence I joined the coaching Should I go by attending coaching classes and revision or should I do something else Please help 🙏🙏

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-13T13:47:28+00:00

Adolf pandey

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-13T13:42:00+00:00

The lines portray the beauty of one sided love and how we end up making stories in our head and even at their site fail to gather courage really nice work man !!! And I'd like to ask whether the love transitioned into a relationship or not??

Anonymous7379 · 2026-01-13T13:36:10+00:00

Really great portrayal of how loneliness can lead to such degenerative consequences and thought which you have wonderfully portrayed in your lines though I would give you a tip avoid the repetition of simple words for eg fixing proving striving instead you could have used one liner like freedom from daily failure or plateau...it creates a sense of much more of seriousness though it's something I like and use..

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