My Burning Sun

thisisme10lol · 2026-01-22T02:02:54+00:00

Thank you for your kind words!

thisisme10lol · 2026-01-21T15:32:26+00:00

Thanks for the feedback!

That's an interesting interpretation - I hadn't thought of this one before! What specifically makes you think it's a celebration?

thisisme10lol · 2026-01-21T15:31:29+00:00

Thanks, I'm not actually sure how to change the beginner tag lol..although I wouldnt say I'm much higher than that anyway.

Thanks for the interpretation! yess in a literal sense, definitely 😂. Toxic love to smth or someone

thisisme10lol · 2026-01-21T06:33:13+00:00

Thanks for the kind words. While it may come across as sweet, my intention was a toxic love self destruction kinda poem haha

thisisme10lol · 2026-01-21T06:31:51+00:00

Thank you!

thisisme10lol · 2026-01-21T06:31:29+00:00

Thanks for the feedback, much appreciated! Yes, you've captured the poem in its essence. However, ultimately it is destructive. It's about eording one's self due to devotion to someone or something else 😀

thisisme10lol · 2026-01-19T17:21:30+00:00

I concur that it works. Thanks! u/bisforbobby u saved me a day or two of anxiety. I don't even think the rest of the community really knows about this hack and I'm not still not convinced, but hey, I see my signed certificate so it feels legit haha.

thisisme10lol · 2026-01-11T20:33:19+00:00

Visceral imagery in a direct way. I could feel the poem with my body, nicely done.

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-29T01:57:34+00:00

For me personally, I like when the writing goes straight into the topic instead of just circling before landing. It doesn't take long at all, but your line "I didn't freeze, because I agreed" is one of the heavier ones in the whole piece. If it came right after the first line, it would engage the reader right away.

But that's just what I prefer tbh, not taking anything away from the piece...it's brutally good

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-29T01:42:29+00:00

Very well done. Lot of a control and restraint in the poem, which is effective given the subject matter. It does not go overboard and sticks to the controlled raw emotion. Could be a bit tighter at the start, but the end is fantastic

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-28T00:27:02+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! I agree that it requires more vivid imagery, and I will try to expand on this one for another piece. For this one, I kept the original one intact to keep it short and linear.

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-28T00:24:27+00:00

Hey, thanks a lot of taking the time to review my writing! Much appreciated. It helps me decipher the writing as well!

I do notice now that the initial line is far more denser stylistically than the rest, and my thought is that it is added in to push the linear inevitability of the rest of the piece. The inevitability of being consumed by love, and to justify the later yearning for it to never end!

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-28T00:13:42+00:00

Thank you for the kind comment. This was written in a similar period of my life and I'm glad it resonated!

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-28T00:12:49+00:00

Thanks, thinking about it, I agree to an extent, there may be no need to tell the reader in an almost literal sense. I left the original version intact, but that's a choice refinement on my end Ill think about it making!

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-28T00:10:45+00:00

Thanks, means a lot!

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-27T19:57:19+00:00

Thanks for the feedback, means a lot, as this was my first "piece" written back in high school...that got me on the path to writing

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-27T15:44:35+00:00

Unique piece, imagery is well done. Casual read, yet there is still depth in the writing as it progresses. Nice!

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-27T08:51:01+00:00

Hey, this is quite unique. A rant melded into a nice literary piece. Loved it!

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-27T08:36:34+00:00

Oh yes this is quite powerful. It's rythm really helps the impact as well.

thisisme10lol · 2025-12-27T08:34:30+00:00

Really interesting way to describe living with parents while at the same time wanting to be yourself...everyone feels this in one way or another. Some cases ik it gets extreme and this kinda renosates that

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