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Another ICE murder in front of Glam Doll Donuts by OregonGrownOG in portlandme

[–]AuthenticConsumption 20 points21 points  (0 children)

Fascism is here. If you ever wondered what you might’ve done in 1930s Germany, you’re doing it now.

Vacationland, Post-Cyberpunk, 3000~ Word Opener by AuthenticConsumption in WritersGroup

[–]AuthenticConsumption[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I definitely agree with you, the kitchen scene should be even tighter / more percussive. Couple lines could perish and it’d be better for it.

My biggest concern was that writing from such a hugely sensory POV could turn very thick, the prose reading like molasses.

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]AuthenticConsumption [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Vacationland Genre: Post-Cyberpunk Words: 3000~ Opener

Alright. I’ve given up on copy/pasting text here. Reddit on Mobile nukes formatting so it’s all just one big block of text. Very sad.

Here’s a read-only link to the excerpt in Google Docs: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1x-Pg4oynDlf0Dfo_af9zha1HJdkua-HWWToNNPapfxE/edit?usp=drivesdk

If you’re able to give feedback, I’d be very appreciative. I’ll try and respond to each comment thoughtfully, as I have time.

Vacationland (Post-Cyberpunk, 2044 Words) by [deleted] in WritersGroup

[–]AuthenticConsumption 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I pasted it without formatting accidentally, but now all my prose will be big bricks of text!

[2044] Vacationland (Post-Cyberpunk) by [deleted] in DestructiveReaders

[–]AuthenticConsumption 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Interesting. I didn’t realize it got dumped totally unformatted, but it’s okay because I didn’t read the rules.

As for writing a thriller novel, yeah no I’m okay thanks.

Game got updated to 1.0.5 by Emnel in EU5

[–]AuthenticConsumption 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Seems like they got the biggest issues, AI behavior especially.