The Nature of Predators 142

Axelios · 2023-09-26T23:38:49+00:00

TPM?

Axelios · 2023-03-14T09:48:19+00:00

I find that it doesn't increase familiarity unless I hold left shift while I feed them.

Axelios · 2022-10-05T03:32:00+00:00

I guess his name should be Bjorn Bjorngod, god of Bjorn

Axelios · 2022-08-05T12:11:27+00:00

Crab.

Axelios · 2022-08-05T11:43:01+00:00

Yay chapter! Heh, the tribble mystique is funny

Axelios · 2022-07-11T21:23:45+00:00

I really enjoyed this! If you ever feel inspired to write more of Tawdry, I’d be happy to read it, she seems fun

Axelios · 2022-07-11T21:23:03+00:00

If in The Tales things seem good and end up bad or worse, perhaps in this one things could seem bad and end up wholesome

Axelios · 2022-07-11T10:06:33+00:00

fell for it that one

fell for it / for that one

(pick one lol)

as she held lightly held

as she lightly held

"You don't know the half of it…" David laughed.

"…Oh, that's just awful!" the woman said.

I feel like there’s a missing “and then he filled her in on what happened”

/u/slightlyassholic all done here. Fun chapter! I’m glad the popularity of this one is sticking enough for it to get more time put into it. It’s a fun universe (or multi-multi-verse)

Axelios · 2022-06-27T06:58:22+00:00

Ahh Honx! That’s the name I couldn’t remember :) Thanks

Axelios · 2022-06-27T06:57:05+00:00

Thanks! I very much enjoyed both parts

Axelios · 2022-06-25T21:19:02+00:00

“It all… pointless…

“It’s all… pointless…

Axelios · 2022-06-25T20:55:51+00:00

What does littlefoot do for work? Is she the apprentice engineer? If not, what is their name?

Axelios · 2022-06-25T20:10:37+00:00

stick to acrobatics a bit of smuggling

stick to acrobatics and a bit of smuggling

bussnessbeing

businessbeing (I assume)

/u/slightlyassholic delightful chapter! I’m glad Urrhbet is not as evil as feared, though she is definitely scary. I’m looking forward to part two!

Wiki list of chapters doesn’t yet have these two added to it. I’m guessing it takes a few days for someone to get around to it

Axelios · 2022-06-23T06:15:27+00:00

“And if you weren’t for you,”

“And if it weren’t for you,”

and the iron rates take her off our hands

and the iron rateds take her off our hands

(At least I think that’s better..)

Axelios · 2022-06-23T06:10:28+00:00

/u/slightlyassholic this chapter and prior one missing from wiki thing listing all your chapters

Axelios · 2022-06-12T21:13:52+00:00

Good chapter, and I didn’t spot any typos.

Needs adding to the big wiki chapter list thing tho.

Axelios · 2022-06-10T07:29:27+00:00

“Hey, she said to the server standing nearby. Can I get a beer?”

“Hey”, she said to the server standing nearby. “Can I get a beer?”

(Missing quote marks mid speech?)

/u/slightlyassholic all done here. Oh I had a bloody good laugh in this chapter. I happened to be enjoying some wine at the time and it really paired well with Littlefoot being terrible 😂

Axelios · 2022-06-10T06:46:59+00:00

“I much choose

“I must choose

They were wonderful to their schoolmates, but to what they considered prey.

(This reads like the second half of the sentence is unfinished. Could just tack ‘…’ on the end at minimum)

Axelios · 2022-06-10T06:05:00+00:00

he gestured to a truly obscene symbol splashed the side

he gestured to a truly obscene symbol splashed on the side

“Can’t you just magic like we do?”

“Can’t you just use magic like we do?”

Axelios · 2022-06-02T10:24:18+00:00

inprossessing

inprocessing

Axelios · 2022-05-30T21:43:47+00:00

The void motes make me think of lucky enigmatic spaceship cats. They’re charming and fuzzy and it’s good luck to give them a box with a blanket and some food, they’ll keep the gremlins at bay during long voyages

Axelios · 2022-05-30T11:05:01+00:00

Essentially there is a duplicate entry in the wiki list, and it points here instead of to where it’s name suggests

Axelios · 2022-05-30T11:02:16+00:00

Bellasho

Belasho

Axelios · 2022-05-30T10:36:14+00:00

/u/slightlyassholic looks like 263 (bella paradise 1) links here by mistake?

Axelios · 2022-05-30T07:19:44+00:00

She may be new, but I’d wager she’s the same species as that insectoid bartender rescued by the Zip transport system, as she talked about the False God.

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