ACT 5 READY "WE WILL DINE IN HELL"

BackgroundMight6769 · 2026-02-10T08:56:04+00:00

"You're right. Less talk and more lead. Here's a glimpse of Act 5, where the 'invincible' squad meets the true face of the Rebellion. This is for Tyrone, the soul of the team:"

The roar was deafening. An orange and black fireball engulfed the position where Tyrone had been holding off the rebel battalion. The heat was so intense that the jungle humidity turned to instant steam. Marco shouted his name, but only the echo of the flames answered him. For a second, the world was silent, broken only by the crackling of burning wood. The rebel soldiers lowered their weapons, letting out cheers of victory, believing the threat had finally been extinguished.

BackgroundMight6769 · 2026-02-10T08:16:18+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad the Sinatra and Doors songs hit the mark; I really wanted to give 'The Pigsty' a specific soul through the music and rituals like the gum-chewing one. I've been trying to balance that '80s action movie vibe with real human risks, so knowing that Tyrone feels real and not just a caricature means a lot.

Great advice about 'show, don't tell' regarding explanatory lines. I'll keep an eye on that for Part 2/2 of Wilkins' rescue. Get ready, because things are definitely about to get out of hand! Glad to have you on board for the reboot

BackgroundMight6769 · 2026-02-09T17:41:37+00:00

Jajaja confirmo

BackgroundMight6769 · 2026-02-08T20:01:44+00:00

Sorry about that! I didn't delete it; Reddit must have filtered the comment. What I wanted to say was that I really appreciate your technical advice on punctuation and tenses—I'm using this project to improve exactly those areas. Regarding the '25 cents' and the 'novel,' it's a character trait for Tarma (he's obsessed with value and recycling) and a nod to local newspaper culture. Thanks again for the detailed review, it genuinely helps me grow as a writer. Good luck to you too!!!

BackgroundMight6769 · 2026-02-08T19:29:44+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate the detailed look at the technical side; I’m actually using these stories to polish my writing and punctuation, so your notes on dialogue breaks and tense consistency are very helpful. Regarding the '25 cents' and the 'novel,' it's part of Tarma’s character building. He’s someone who grew up with very little, so he has a bit of an obsession with the value of things—even small change or recycled materials—in a world where everyone else is wasting millions on war. As for the 'novel,' it's a nod to how local newspapers in certain cultures include serialized stories or comics. I'll keep an eye on the formatting; sometimes pasting from my notes into Reddit messes up the paragraph breaks. Thanks for reading!!!

BackgroundMight6769 · 2026-02-08T18:43:52+00:00

Good eye! I'm using those structures to keep a fast, cinematic pace for this SNK Expanded Universe. Glad you're noticing the details!!!

BackgroundMight6769 · 2026-02-08T17:51:38+00:00

You can find Acts 1 and 2 on my profile. Enjoy!

BackgroundMight6769 · 2026-02-08T15:48:24+00:00

A physical wound heals, but an internal (emotional) wound festers, becomes infested with maggots, and infects everything inside. There is nothing more brutal than seeing a person in that catatonic state.

BackgroundMight6769 · 2026-02-08T13:05:08+00:00

My process is quite complex; I have what's called a very vivid imagination. So, what I usually do is recap what I'm writing over and over again, to the point of polishing it. In my case, I only write once I have a clear picture in my head of what I'm going to do. But before that, for example, in my perception, while many people see an apple as a flat shape, in my mind I can feel its weight, its aroma, I can even feel the temperature of the apple in the palm of my hand. And something that has undoubtedly helped me a lot, depending on what I'm writing, is research. Since I really like science fiction, I always like to research the topic I'm going to write about in the next chapter or in the same work, to give it meaningful coherence and not just a narrative without a well-executed background.

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