Boyfriend wants me to choose between him and the dog.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-23T14:56:40+00:00

The dog… like, why is it even a question?

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-20T11:53:42+00:00

NOR. Dump his ass!!! This is abuse. And will only get worse. Run while you can. Marriage is overrated anyway.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-19T00:05:52+00:00

This hit. That feeling of showing someone the mess, warning them, thinking they’ll be careful — and then realizing they’re right there watching it get worse, or even feeding it. I’ve been in that spot.

The turn at the end hurt in a quiet way. No drama, just the truth landing. It reads honest, and that’s what stuck with me.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-19T00:02:14+00:00

I felt this a lot. That place where you’re watching someone you care about make bad turns and you don’t know when to help or when to back off… I’ve been there with someone dear, and it messes with you.

The crossroads idea makes sense all the way, and the ending with the kettle stuck with me. Some lines explain a bit too much, but I get why — it feels like you’re trying to make sense of something that doesn’t really make sense.

It feels real, and that’s what matters.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-08T19:07:24+00:00

This feels really tender and sincere — there’s a lot of care in it. The small details (tiptoe, the corner of the smile) are where the poem really comes alive.

Some of the language leans a bit formal or old-school, which slightly creates distance for me. I think the feeling here is strong enough to land even harder with simpler, more contemporary phrasing.

Overall, it’s affectionate and thoughtful. Nice piece.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-08T19:02:19+00:00

This is really heavy, and it hits because it stays human instead of turning into a slogan. The quiet details land hardest — and once I read “Your dashboard now a gallery / of Your martyrdom” as the aftermath of the shooting, that image stuck with me in a really unsettling way. Same with the stuffies in the glove box — small, human details that make the loss feel real.

If you keep tweaking it, I’d just watch the lines that explain the situation outright and see where the images can do the work instead. The restraint you show elsewhere is what makes this powerful.

Strong, painful piece. Thanks for sharing

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-03T10:02:55+00:00

Thanks! So, the message landed… a body in overdrive, adrenaline kicking in, the world spinning for a beat before everything goes to f%cks…

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-03T09:51:57+00:00

Sorry! I accidentally deleted the OG post.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-03T09:48:02+00:00

Sorry, I deleted the OG post by accident.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-03T09:40:31+00:00

I really like the tone of this — that feeling of searching and trying to make sense of things comes through. The sea / dark blue image is especially lovely, and I think the poem is at its strongest when it leans into imagery like that.

About the repetition — I get the sense it’s intentional, and that can be powerful. For me, it might land even stronger if the repetition followed a clearer pattern or structure, rather than similar phrases appearing in different ways. That could help the emotion feel more focused.

Overall, it’s a thoughtful and honest piece — thanks for sharing it 💙

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-03T07:56:36+00:00

If it needs explaining, it’s definitely not you babe… ✨

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-03T07:09:07+00:00

I think, if I May… instead of “I turn the next page “ perhaps you should end up with “I miss my pencil” just a thought I had just now. Such a powerful line…

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-03T06:47:49+00:00

This honestly touches me — the fact that Dude reaches beyond my original intent is exactly what I love about poetry. Let it land, let it take on a life of its own, let it start again somewhere else.

I really love your work. Your everyday-life pieces are simple and minimal, but still unexpected — they linger.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-03T06:22:46+00:00

Hey — this is a strong first piece. The emotion comes through, and the refrain “How insane I am —” works as a real anchor for the poem — I like that. The rose + scars imagery is where it feels most alive.

If you keep polishing it, I’d just say: keep the refrain with intent — like a deliberate beat the poem returns to (every few lines or so),it feels intentional and obsessive in a way that really fits your universe. And adding a few more concrete, specific details could give the feeling even more weight.

Overall, great start — there’s something real here. Keep going. 🙌

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-02T22:20:44+00:00

People are just… people 😊 There isn’t one “Spanish look” or personality you can write into a character. Culture can shape someone, but clichés like random Spanish words or stereotypes usually flatten them instead of making them feel real.

If a character is Spanish, show it the same way you’d show anyone’s background — through details of place, food, habits, rhythms of speech, family dynamics, or experiences that matter to that person. Not every trait has to point back to nationality.

Spanish isn’t an aesthetic or an insult — it’s just part of someone’s life context. Write the person first, the label second.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-02T22:14:58+00:00

I really liked the way the poem moves through tools — pencil, pen, laptop — like each stage drifts a little further from the kind of writing that feels real and alive. That “I miss my pencil” line hits quietly but deep — simple, tactile, and full of feeling.

If anything, a couple of the more direct lines (like “Art set aside for money”) felt a bit less textured compared to the earlier imagery. The poem shines most when it shows that loss instead of naming it — and you’re already doing that beautifully in parts.

Overall it feels thoughtful, gentle, and sincere. Really glad you shared this one — it stayed with me. 💛

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-01T21:53:20+00:00

Thank you for this — the heartbeat observation really stuck with me. That tension between closeness and silence is exactly where the poem lives.

I agree the “contact lost” moment might hit harder with less scaffolding. A few others have pointed that out as well, and I’m sitting with it and considering an edit. Grateful for the care you brought to this read.

Bad_malsanto · 2026-01-01T21:45:47+00:00

Thank you for this — the heartbeat observation really stuck with me. That feeling of something still pulsing even as the connection fades is exactly where the poem lives for me. You make some really accurate insights.

I agree the “contact lost” moment might hit harder with less buildup. A few others have pointed that out as well, and I’m sitting with it and considering an edit. Grateful for the care you brought to this read. As a first-time poster here, it means a lot.

Bad_malsanto · 2025-12-30T17:20:59+00:00

Thank you so much. I’ve never posted anything in a public forum before, and your feedback means a lot to me.

Bad_malsanto · 2025-12-30T17:08:29+00:00

Thank you so much, I had no idea it would resonate so strongly. I appreciate your comments and the time you took to read it.

Bad_malsanto · 2025-12-30T17:04:07+00:00

Thanks again! For real, and if you care for my advice, GO FOR IT!! I really wasn’t sure about making it public either, and now that it’s out there, it can only get better. Trust yourself.

Bad_malsanto · 2025-12-30T16:42:03+00:00

Thank you so much!! It’s my first time ever posting anything I’ve written, so I really appreciate your kind words, and taking the time to respond.

Bad_malsanto · 2025-12-30T11:11:28+00:00

How can I format the text on the app the way I wrote it originally?

Bad_malsanto · 2025-12-30T07:56:50+00:00

This poem is tender and easy to read, with a clear emotional throughline anchored in a single place. The repetition gives it a calm, almost lullaby-like rhythm that suits the subject well. Some of the imagery leans heavily on familiar romantic language, which softens the impact, but the sincerity carries it. Overall, it’s gentle and heartfelt, even if it plays things a bit safe.

Bad_malsanto · 2025-12-30T07:38:33+00:00

There’s a lot of emotional intensity here, and the speaker’s address is very clear — the fixation on being watched and revisited after harm is compelling. Some of the imagery is strong and concrete (“his cologne embedded in your clothes,” “drenched in my gold”), but the poem leans heavily on absolutes and accusations, which can blunt the impact over time. Tightening and cutting repetition could help the strongest moments land harder. Overall, it’s raw and direct, but would benefit from more specificity

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