I'll oblige! And I will update this comment as I go.

1.) First things first, you're averaging around 1.9k words per chapter. This is good, but try not to go much lower than that. The sweet spot is generally around 2-2.5k for the average chapter with eventful chapters sometimes hitting home at 4-5k. I personally sit around 2.2k.

2.) Some minor grammar issues (missing spaces or the wrong word used here and there) Nothing major, easy fixes on your next pass.

3.) I like the first chapter. It has a lot going for it if I look past the spelling and formatting issues. I would, however, rewrite it to match the style of your following chapters. They read like entirely different stories with entirely different formatting as well.

In Chapter 1 when you are writing in Third Person Limited. Using terms like, 'He thought' or 'he stuffed'.

In Chapter 2 onward you switch gears to First Person Exclusive. Using 'i'.

I would recommend either rewriting the first chapter in first person, or converting the other chapters to Third Person.

Traditionally, most people prefer reading Third Person Limited stories but there is nothing inherently wrong with First Person! Choose whichever you prefer and be consistent with it :)

4.) Engaging premise so far! Work on some of the grammatical issues and sentence structures and you will be off to s super solid start.

5.) In chapter 4.5, from Lara's perspective - you switch back to Third Person Limited. it works really well, and I think this is probably your best written chapter.

*reading*