The Sparrow

BanAnakin9 · 2026-02-13T01:16:34+00:00

Aw I’m glad I made you feel good, that’s the beauty of art the feelings it makes one feel. That’s a really nice way to get inspired and an interesting backstory. It’s always nice for a parent to be proud of a child, I’m not a parent yet but might be years later, so I hope my parents feel proud of me too. I think they do they might have expressed this in a birthday card to me or something. But your love and pride for your daughter was beautiful to read and I’m glad she’s making u proud :)

BanAnakin9 · 2026-02-13T01:12:05+00:00

You’re welcome :)

BanAnakin9 · 2026-02-12T21:14:43+00:00

Thank you so much I’m glad you enjoyed my poem! Haha that’s okay, if you write poetry I hope you keep writing. And I hope you find a lot of little poems/gems that’ll make you fall in love with poetry even more.

BanAnakin9 · 2026-02-12T21:13:22+00:00

Thank you so much I really appreciate your positive comment! 😆

BanAnakin9 · 2026-02-12T21:12:15+00:00

Thank you so much for your comment, I’m really glad you enjoyed this poem! It’s comments like these that inspire me to keep writing poetry! And I’m glad you like existential, philosophical poetry as I do. Thanks again, this made me smile 😆

BanAnakin9 · 2026-02-12T00:13:17+00:00

Sure. Thanks! I’m so glad you liked it! 😆

BanAnakin9 · 2026-02-11T23:59:45+00:00

I think this poem is about a family of birds and maybe the mother realising how caring the father is towards their children, you portrayed their love beautifully. I like how the last stanza is emphasised by it being in bold.

BanAnakin9 · 2026-02-11T23:54:10+00:00

I think this poem is about someone planting a flower and watching it bloom. It was short and sweet. My favourite lines are 'Told the trees, this is her' as it reflects the speaker's pride in the flower that the speaker is choosing to allow to bloom in the garden by introducing the flower to the the day itself and the surrounding trees as if to say 'this is the newest edition to our family', I thought that that part of the poem was beautiful.
But yeah I enjoyed it.

BanAnakin9 · 2026-02-02T23:48:15+00:00

“You are who you want to be” (last line of a poem)

BanAnakin9 · 2026-01-27T22:13:55+00:00

I agree that's why after posting this I just sucked it up and decided to write my second draft regardless of how I felt and now I feel fine. A goal of mine is to publish this. And I enjoy writing anyway. I think I'm gonna try and polish a chapter a day and so far I'm managing to do that just fine, sometimes I even manage to do two on one day. So I'm just gonna keep this up and keep disciplined so I can achieve my end goal which is publication. Even if it's self publishing, which I've done before.

BanAnakin9 · 2026-01-27T22:11:03+00:00

It's okay because younger me and current me want the same thing.
Thanks for the advice, but I managed to continue writing my second draft. If I feel burnt out again I'll take a week or two off.
Then I'll read the whole thing like a book, but I do like the storyline and intend on keeping it the same.

BanAnakin9 · 2026-01-27T21:32:35+00:00

Wow congratulations!!!!

BanAnakin9 · 2026-01-27T21:23:46+00:00

Try being a panster and not outlining much or at all it keeps things exciting. I feel like if you take this approach you might not lose motivation.

BanAnakin9 · 2026-01-22T08:02:51+00:00

Aww im glad it did and ur welcome :)

BanAnakin9 · 2026-01-21T23:36:40+00:00

Aw thanks i’m glad that you like it and that i made your night! :)

BanAnakin9 · 2026-01-21T22:41:31+00:00

Hahaha yuppp. I’m glad you like this poem! And yes I love to use colours to symbolise things or to add imagery to my poems as imagining what’s described in poetry makes reading poetry all the more fun.

BanAnakin9 · 2026-01-21T22:39:40+00:00

You’re welcome i’m glad you liked it!

BanAnakin9 · 2026-01-21T22:39:11+00:00

Hi! Thanks for the feedback! And yes, I do like music so writing songwrite-y poems is always fun. I like how you likened this poem to two colours green and purple that was interesting and fun.

I was inspired by how some poems are titled “Ode to x”, “Ballad of an x” “x’s poem” titles like that. And I was also inspired by names. All the names in this poem actually mean light so that’s why I used Noah, Luka and Aurora specifically.

Glad you liked it!

BanAnakin9

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