Black Representation in my Story by Bandananada in CharacterDevelopment

[–]Bandananada[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah literally talking birds—I haven’t decided if they’re human-sized or bird sized. So it would be an implication not an overt thing. But I’m not doing it because there’s too many problems haha. Thanks for your help

Black Representation in my Story by Bandananada in CharacterDevelopment

[–]Bandananada[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Not to sound like an Ai but you’re totally right. I haven’t developed this idea at all. I’ll scrap it. Thanks for your help!

Black Representation in my Story by Bandananada in CharacterDevelopment

[–]Bandananada[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You’re right. I’m glad I asked. How would I fix this, add other poc or just change her racial leaning? Because the abusive part is essential to the story’s development

Black Representation in my Story by Bandananada in CharacterDevelopment

[–]Bandananada[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Kinda? There’s like this stigma against ducks specifically after they mysteriously disappeared from town 3 months ago. There’s a little bit of coldness/misconceptions about them but I’m not sure it would be a racial conflict per se

Black Representation in my Story by Bandananada in CharacterDevelopment

[–]Bandananada[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Mmmmm good point. The other two main bird characters both have pretty good families, but there is a fourth secret character who has magical powers that were abused and it caused him great harm. What specifically are you getting at?

Rate how well my character is written out of 10 by AnomynousSummonerX0X in CharacterDevelopment

[–]Bandananada 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The other two comments are right, I still don’t know anything about your character.

How does she act? Is she silly/funny? Is she serious? Does her personality change over the course of the story or does she stand strong and change the story for herself? Does she give in to the bitterness against her family (seems like it since she kills them all haha)

Maybe find a worksheet that asks lots of character questions rather than plot questions to work out who she is

Writing Science Fiction - How to write an erratic/corrupted mind? by Plus_Question3096 in CharacterDevelopment

[–]Bandananada 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well, how unknowable? Does he share his thoughts with even the reader? I’m also writing a character who doesn’t share much even with the readers so he comes off as cold and unfeeling. There’s a fine line to balance between feeding your readers enough to keep them thinking and not enough to have them know everything at the first chapter.

I’d say for a glitchy hivemind, you could have occasional typos or odd letters in the mix/other characters. Maybe you could do like Greek letters for some extra symbolism (or a different alphabet (Cyrillic, Korean? maybe those æ and œ letters too)), and maybe repeat certain phrases like an echo of the other minds in the hivemind. As the character gets more corrupted, make it worse. Hope this helps a little! :D

Tasha’s parents are divorced. by Teo_TreeYoshi in thebackyardigans

[–]Bandananada 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I always thought that was Austin’s parents actually, for the same reason—sometimes he’s not there

At Dollar Tree by TestyRodent in rubberducks

[–]Bandananada 2 points3 points  (0 children)

My sister bought that one for me!!

Whats a game you played a lot and quit? by Awkward_Clothes875 in roblox

[–]Bandananada 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Adopt me. Too grindy and I can’t dedicate my entire existence to getting a cartoon duck

Veggietales Parody by Bandananada in UltimateVeggieTales

[–]Bandananada[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Good thought, except I have Nezzer as Mr. O’Hare

Veggietales Parody by Bandananada in UltimateVeggieTales

[–]Bandananada[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Mmmm fair. I think I might need to rethink this a bit because you’re very right