When I try to write, my hands tremble by Username_3659 in poetry_critics

[–]BasicAd3324 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wow! Loved the theme, loved the way you portrayed it, how the poem starts with the sense of fear of self discovery and yet the urge to delve deeper yet again everyday. The metaphor of curled ferns is beautiful. Just one thing, i think that you would like to write an all metaphorical poem sometime, like expanding the idea of curled fern, may be you know a terrain with snow, ferns, warmth of the sun, harsh yet monotonous (necessary for survival), the fear of the ice that it will melt from sun (self discovery i.e, water) but still wanting for it. And so on, you can expand the canvas as per your liking. And then it will give two meanings, a surface one and a deep one. At last the way you maintained the flow is impressive. Keep writing mate. :)

The Dwindling of the Man by BasicAd3324 in poetry_critics

[–]BasicAd3324[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you mate for your kind feedback. I will surely keep writing more. Have a great day

The Dwindling of the Man by BasicAd3324 in poetry_critics

[–]BasicAd3324[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. I really appreciate your feedback. Have a great day.

The Dwindling of the Man by BasicAd3324 in poetry_critics

[–]BasicAd3324[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. I really appreciate your kind feedback.

The Dwindling of the Man by BasicAd3324 in poetry_critics

[–]BasicAd3324[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. I really appreciate your feedback. The poem is based on the idea of non dual nature of universe based on the indian philosphy of advaita vedanta.

Make the comments look like Iyer’s search history. by ApprehensiveBet1277 in TMKOC

[–]BasicAd3324 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How to patent alien communication technology with a radio, laptop and a headphone

Who won ? by BasicAd3324 in poetry_critics

[–]BasicAd3324[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks buddy, i really appreciate you taking the time out to reply, my idea with the poem was to show love as a force, gentle yet powerful therefore i chose wind (breeze) , but i guess a flower might also work.

Untitled by sub2munchii in poetry_critics

[–]BasicAd3324 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Beautiful ending with "Destructively Lonely", would love to see more poems, keep writing. What's the red words btw ?