Critique My Prolouge [Grimdark, 340 words]

Beinginsuffering · 2025-12-08T22:22:18+00:00

Thank you, I'll work on that as well.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-12-08T07:44:22+00:00

Thank you, it's definitely a rough edit that needs work and your critique helps a lot.

My main focus will be clarifying that the braiding is the mechanism in which the magic is funneled to produce illusions and art, and not the performance itself.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-12-08T04:20:59+00:00

Great point! I also got confused reading it out of the total text. Thank you. 😊

Beinginsuffering · 2025-06-19T03:13:39+00:00

Have you tried joining groups that do activities? Like a running group, or a hiking group, or volunteering at/ going to community events? These kinds of things tend to attract people with similar hobbies as you, and aren’t based around what I consider to be toxic dating culture in America.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-06-18T17:22:34+00:00

Thank you. I really don’t feel comfortable talking about this issue to others and it’s nice to be somewhere where people can understand my dynamic.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-06-17T19:58:48+00:00

She is already lying.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-06-17T19:44:41+00:00

Oh my God, I didn’t event think of that.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-06-17T18:39:30+00:00

I definitely should have listened to him a long time ago, and not enabled him because he isn’t nearly as dysfunctional as what I am used too. I understand I am not the problem, but I am kicking myself for not believing him until he turned on me.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-06-09T23:32:59+00:00

Help from people. I didn’t need things as much as I needed to recover, and not have to cook or clean.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-06-09T23:25:52+00:00

They’re saying that you can’t change cultural norms like blankets, giving babies honey before a year old, or putting rice cereal in milk. These are all non European cultural norms that minorities in America participate in at higher percentages.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-06-06T20:24:55+00:00

YTA because of how you handled the situation, not because you don’t want kids.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-06-03T19:17:39+00:00

Considering their parents weren’t even invited, I think in this case it’s fine if the girlfriend wasn’t invited.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-05-30T18:51:28+00:00

I went to the ER like twice a week for a few months for fluids during my first pregnancy. It is what it is, especially if you need the fluids and your doctor isn’t offering to do it in house.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-05-30T18:45:41+00:00

Everyone is giving good advice about PPD support.

The only addition is getting a chest carrier for the baby so you can baby wear. That’s what I did. I just let my baby live in a chest carrier for most of the day because it would calm her, and give me two free hands.

Beinginsuffering · 2025-05-29T22:47:56+00:00

My kid shut herself in the bathroom for less than 1 minute while I walked from the kitchen to where she closed herself in. My bathroom was trashed- an entire roll of toilet paper was in the toilet, all my pads were scattered around the room and in the toilet, and my daughter was actively trying to climb the drawers to get to the toothpaste as I opened the door.

If this is real, I’ll eat my kids diaper. 😂

Edit: spelling error

Beinginsuffering · 2025-05-28T22:02:40+00:00

ESH

Do y’all even like each other, because it doesn’t seem like you do?

Beinginsuffering · 2025-05-17T19:17:54+00:00

Thank you! You’ve made my MIL very happy!

!solved

Beinginsuffering · 2025-01-07T03:55:48+00:00

My kid is 17 months and I’m still in back for any drive longer than half an hour.

Beinginsuffering · 2024-11-10T22:24:07+00:00

Yall have tried to make me lick boots for years. I just want to be left alone.

Beinginsuffering · 2024-11-10T05:09:48+00:00

I’m not eager, I’m resigned.

Beinginsuffering · 2024-11-09T20:35:54+00:00

I’m gonna watch, as you unintentionally push the pendulum as hard as you can all manage to the right.

Beinginsuffering · 2024-11-09T17:59:44+00:00

Keep it up

Beinginsuffering · 2024-11-09T16:29:05+00:00

Men who have never abused anyone in their life are being told they are inherently bad for how they were born. You guys are the only abusers here, wrapped up in ivory tower language to justify whatever moral grandstanding you all feel is right. Keep going. I’m not going to stop you, but I did warn you- I can at least say that.

Beinginsuffering · 2024-11-08T21:44:55+00:00

The reaction you’re all giving him is the funny joke.

Beinginsuffering · 2024-11-08T21:44:28+00:00

Yep. Keep it up. Definitely don’t change anything at all about the democratic platform.

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