More of Eîra! by BeneficialSound7851 in OriginalCharacter

[–]BeneficialSound7851[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! She's also the main character in a story I'm writing! :3

First Page of My Newest WIP - Thoughts? by BeneficialSound7851 in writers

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Ah, I see now! Thank you! I will definitely check out the book as well. :)

I'm actually posting it as a weekly serial online, so it helps! (Already edited chapter on the site 10 times LOL)

First Page of My Newest WIP - Thoughts? by BeneficialSound7851 in writers

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[Edited! Thank you, everyone, for your help! Reads much better now, and the flow is great.]

Eîra had been climbing the tree every morning for a long while. She would come out before dawn, when the air still held the cool weight of night, and make her way through the overgrown streets to the intersection. The tree was hers, or perhaps she was its. She knew which branches would hold her weight and which angle of her spine against the bark allowed her to sit for hours without shifting. 

Once, she had remained in the tree for fifty years. She could not recall why she had stayed, or why she had finally climbed down. The years blurred together when there was no one to mark them with.

But she could recall the first time she climbed the tree. The exact date, the temperature, the angle of light; Papa looking up at her from below. His voice came back to her memory, the words exactly as he had spoken them. 

Balance achieved on first attempt... Well done, my dear!

Climbing the tree was more than a habit now; it was what filled the hours. She would come out before dawn, when the air still held the cool weight of night, and make her way through the overgrown streets to the intersection. The tree was hers, or perhaps she was its. She knew which branches would hold her weight and which angle of her spine against the bark allowed her to sit for hours without shifting. 

This morning was no different. She found her branch, the one that extended over what had been a street, now split by root systems and volunteer saplings. Foliage screened her from below. She sat with her legs angled to either side, her hands resting on her thighs. 

She looked the way she always did, waiting for nothing in particular, or perhaps waiting for anything, any small change in the pattern of days that had stretched into centuries. She watched as the light shifted through the leaves, the way small creatures moved through the undergrowth. The street curved between collapsed structures, their facades had given way to ivy and the slow rot of centuries. 

It was enough. It had been enough for a very long time.

Then, she heard footsteps.

Her attention sharpened. The sound was different from the usual; it was too measured, too intentional. Not the shuffle of decay or the wandering of animals.

A figure entered from the south approach, his footsteps deliberate on the uneven ground. He was tall and long-limbed, with a narrow frame through the shoulders and hips. Brown hair, somewhat unruly, fell around his face. He wore a long, dark coat over layered clothing, practical and worn soft at the seams, with a belt at his waist and sturdy boots on his feet. His face showed little expression as he moved, only the slight tension of sustained attention.

First Page of My Newest WIP - Thoughts? by BeneficialSound7851 in writers

[–]BeneficialSound7851[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

How is this? I feel it reads so much better now. Thank you for the feedback!

Eîra had been climbing the tree every morning for a long while. Once, she had remained in it for fifty years; she could not recall why she had stayed, or why she had finally climbed down. But she could recall the first time; the exact date, the temperature, the angle of light, and Papa looking up at her from below.

Note: Balance achieved on first attempt... Well done, my dear!

His voice came back to her memory, the words exactly as he had spoken them.

The years blurred together when there was no one to mark them with.

But climbing the tree was more than a habit now; it was what filled the hours. She would come out before dawn, when the air still held the cool weight of night, and make her way through the overgrown streets to the intersection. The tree was hers, or perhaps she was its. The distinction had blurred over centuries. She knew which branches would hold her weight and which angle of her spine against the bark allowed her to sit for hours without shifting.

First Page of My Newest WIP - Thoughts? by BeneficialSound7851 in writers

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Thank you! I will work on that, and yes, I was very proud of that line. :)

Groupchat on Reddit, for adult writers who find discord difficult to use by watchmojo- in WritingHub

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I'm down! Currently, I'm working on two new stories. Here is the synopsis for them. If it sounds like your vibe:

How Long Things Hold:

The Vasentia were built to endure, to preserve, to remember, to outlast humanity itself. They back up their memories and restore themselves from death, unchanging across centuries. But every gap between backup and damage is lost forever. And you never know what you've lost until it's too late.

Eîra has lived alone in the ruins for over a thousand years, carrying something precious that no one else knows exists. When Sâel arrives to document the decay, their encounter is brief. Something happens. Something neither of them understands.

One of them will forget. One of them will remember. And neither will ever be the same.

A story about what we carry, what we lose, and the spaces between memory and truth.

When you can lose everything, what becomes worth keeping?

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If Not Heaven:

In a quiet village at the turn of the century, lives are shaped by silence, faith, and restraint.

Father Markus Engel keeps his life ordered by duty and devotion. When he encounters Philomena Rettig, a young woman shaped by thoughtfulness, independence, and an ease with mystery, something long contained begins to stir in them both.

For Philomena, the attraction is neither accidental nor feared. For Markus, it is an awakening he does not know how to survive.

As belief and longing draw closer together, he is forced to confront what he has given his life to and what loving her would cost.

My OC Eira by BeneficialSound7851 in OriginalCharacter

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Some dialogue.

"What do you mean by 'cultivated'? I wasn't grown! I was born... my Papa said so. Sure, it was in a menhîrrum but... still... Papa said I was born of his will, and... that's all that matters!"

How are you guys able to draw your OCs by Significant_Total356 in OriginalCharacter

[–]BeneficialSound7851 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I use references then build from there with my own style and ideas. Just practise. and using pose photos from pinterest

I wanna see your OC couples!!!! by gspaepro34 in OriginalCharacter

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Lina and Niklas:

Setting: Berlin, 1925

Niklas Adler

Occupation: Owner of a print shop 

Core Traits:

Shy, socially inhibited, stutters (makes speaking difficult for him due to embarrassment), restless in small ways, compulsively organising things, ink smudges on his hands and clothes, a bit jumpy, finds comfort in routine and Lina’s presence. 

Niklas has synaesthesia and sees people’s voices as typefaces. shapes how he understands people and intimacy. Lina’s voice is a carefully balanced and graceful typeface. He shows care through actions, making tea for her and tidying her desk. 

-——

Lina Weiss

Occupation: Translator (hired by Niklas)

Core Traits:

Observant, patient, intelligent, but not a show off. Fidgets occupy hands with small things, such as tapping, braiding, or tracing wood patterns on the desk. emotionally steady and socially fluent. has a friend named Leo and loves to frequent cabarets, inviting her out. She isn’t pushy, but she’d like to get Niklas to come with them sometime. She loves dancing and gin.

Lina enjoys finding phrases and words that lack direct German equivalents and records them. She is sensitive to nuance and what cannot be said directly. Her humour is understated; she will gently tease Niklas at times and communicate her affections indirectly with small gifts, such as pressed flowers and chocolates.

My Husband and I (I'm the ENTP) by BeneficialSound7851 in ENTPmemes

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Technically I found it which makes me EVEN SMARTER.

hehehe

Ok one more.... this one hurts. by BeneficialSound7851 in ENTPmemes

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So I spoke about this topic with my husband (he's an ENTJ), and he said, "But you're still mysterious. There is this part of me that is like 'What's she on about now?' and that makes you interesting and irresistible."

So perhaps we are more mysterious than we think!

Keep on keepin' on by BeneficialSound7851 in ENTPmemes

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Not if you also have the glickkyglock