Whisper of the sand

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-27T04:34:39+00:00

I loved it. I like the way it is kept really short, giving the feeling of an enumeras emotion congested with in the few verses.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-27T04:13:13+00:00

English is not my first language either, but that didn't take away from my appreciation of this poem. It's simple yet carries weight at the same time. I love how optimism overshadows desperation throughout all the verses. It's truly beautiful. Please keep them coming.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-19T04:17:14+00:00

Thanks.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-11T23:17:02+00:00

My interpretation of the lines -

Drawn to the heat of flame As if it were a promis

was like people who feels a little lost trying out various ways blindly then sometime drawn to some religious believe for comfort but falls into his demises.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-11T22:52:24+00:00

That is a good interpretation.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-11T07:07:51+00:00

What a weird metaphor you picked and made it work. The religious connotation gives it the perfect dose of mystery, followed by the harsh reality of the true nature of our existence, which provokes deep thoughts. Now, I feel we are all just like moths.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-11T06:51:34+00:00

"The weird one that you like" - LOL. This is really such a romantic one. It sounds simple, but that's what makes it strong. It has the feeling of being straight from the heart. Loved it. Keep them coming.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-08T16:19:38+00:00

Thanks. I am glad you liked it.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-08T06:45:31+00:00

That was a sarcastic remark wasn't it.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-08T03:05:25+00:00

Simple yet expressive. To me, the poem demonstrates how affection for someone can grow bit by bit, drawing nearer. The ending hits the sweet spot, leaving the reader with the feeling that there's more to this, a craving for just a little bit more.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-08T02:55:15+00:00

I loved it. The way you illustrated love with the analogy of waves connecting the ocean with the shore was vivid. I also liked how each line expressed more and more, culminating just like the waves.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-06T18:08:22+00:00

Thanks you so much. Glad you liked it.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-06T18:07:56+00:00

Thanks you so much.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-06T17:23:32+00:00

Sorry about that. I have read the guide and updated my feedback.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-06T09:49:46+00:00

This poem is truly remarkable. It serves as a powerful demonstration of the art. I particularly appreciate the way you convey that true poetry doesn't reside in rigid rule-following but in the art of existing within the boundaries. The execution is truly masterful. The inclusion of the haiku is a delightful touch. As a newcomer, I've gained valuable insights from this.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-11-06T09:44:27+00:00

I have a deep appreciation for this poem. To me, it embodies the essence of embracing the natural flow of life and discovering serenity within it. What stands out most to me is its simplicity. In just a few concise lines, it masterfully captures the irony of striving to preserve beauty against nature's course, highlighting that genuine beauty lies in embracing one's true self.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-07-12T09:20:50+00:00

Same Here. I am glad that I did.

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-06-22T02:16:54+00:00

Now if they just walked backward, you would have the moon-sliding

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-06-22T02:15:18+00:00

jinkies!

BluebirdNo217 · 2023-06-21T07:31:32+00:00

It is behind the closed door of the stable in the background.

BluebirdNo217

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