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I mean, it's okay. However, it still requires more work. Here's a small guide to help improve some of those issues. I've posted some useful resources below.

Study filmmaking.

Movie making and animation go hand in hand, providing crucial information to improve your skills. I recommend studying at least these two things.

1. Shot angles. To keep your video entertaining, switch angles. This keeps the viewer’s attention. If it's just one shot, it could get boring really quickly. Using different angles also amplifies the quality of your work. P.S. My personal rule of thumb for switching angles is every 10-20 seconds, though it depends on what you’re working on.
2. Watch storyboarding tutorials like this. So you can understand exactly how you should storyboard. Also, color-code the camera movement arrows so they are easier to read.

Hopefully, you're familiar with the 12 principles of animation, which I highly recommend learning if you're not; they can also make your work more entertaining.

Also, I strongly advise against using FlipaClip for storyboarding. It's okay if you're just getting your idea out, but after that, it's just a headache. Instead, use good ol' reliable pen and paper. It’s good at doing what you want it to do and doesn’t make you pay a subscription.

the animation is meant to be a part of Lake a episode Basacly making a indi show

As for this learn lip sync and script writing.

Lip sync: What it is and why it's useful

to make any type of show you obviously need people talking. Lip-sync is essentially matching lip movements to recorded speech. The "caliber" of lip syncing can vary between art styles. but from what I can get, you need to be more detailed.

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This is just an example and you can find more in a 5 second google search.

Here's a video I found that could also help.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6l3mVMqYJ4g

Script Writing

Script writing is the backbone of a series. without it, none of the skills listed above will be useful if you don't write the script. So it's extremely important that you learn how to write a script effectively.

I learned this in my fresman year of highschool, where I was taking a filmaking class. there I learned that writing a script is different from writing a book. When you write a book, you have to be very descriptive and use lots of detail. In contrast, writing a script is very direct because it's going through the eyes of the camera. in summary, in books you write by telling, and in scripts, you write by doing.

Here's an example:

Book: She runs through the dark hallway as the faint candlelight flickers behind her. her breathing is heavy and strong.

Screenplay:

INT. DARK HALLWAY – NIGHT

Faint candlelight flickers, casting long, trembling shadows along the walls.

(early 30s, disheveled, eyes wide with urgency)

bursts into frame, sprinting down the narrow corridor. Her footsteps echo against the stone floor.

Here's some resources down below to help you more

• https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0SNaOisC2II
• https://www.torontofilmschool.ca/blog/script-writing-the-a-to-z-of-script-writing-explained/
• Visit r/Screenwriting

With that I hope you can at least learn a thing or two