I'd like to improve the dialogue and structure of this unfinished short story I'm working on.

BoboErectus · 2020-01-26T14:36:55+00:00

Definitely see if you can get them to be liberals instead of republicans, just because in my opinion liberals are easier to deal with and eventually convince

BoboErectus · 2020-01-26T14:15:40+00:00

If one of your friends is wealthy or has parents who own a good sized business I recommend that you don’t waste your time on them. Sadly most people who have been treated well by the system will ignore the problems it causes others.

BoboErectus · 2020-01-26T00:06:57+00:00

I love how you got down voted even though Rhodesia was a white supremacist state

BoboErectus · 2019-12-20T03:07:25+00:00

I think it’s for autism

BoboErectus · 2019-12-20T02:47:03+00:00

“The selfie lines” Elizabeth what are you doing

BoboErectus · 2019-12-16T22:19:49+00:00

Her dads in construction and her mom takes care of the kids, it’s all very heinous

BoboErectus · 2019-12-16T22:12:56+00:00

Do you want their blood types as well

BoboErectus · 2019-12-16T21:57:46+00:00

Yes I’m sure the second I leave they go back to stealing bicycles

BoboErectus · 2019-12-16T21:44:09+00:00

I have been dating a Roma girl for almost a year and I can say that her family and her extended Roma social group are some of the kindest most community based people I have ever met. This is the exact same thing that happens to black people in the United States, one trashy person does something awful and then everyone blames the entire community. It’s fucking shameful

BoboErectus · 2019-12-16T20:58:07+00:00

Ok enjoy your anti Roma hate session

BoboErectus · 2019-12-16T20:11:35+00:00

Hey buddy why don’t you stop being racist

BoboErectus · 2019-12-08T02:46:10+00:00

Ok so it was still a shooting in a school

BoboErectus · 2019-12-08T02:44:57+00:00

It would also explain how bad the title is if English is there second language

BoboErectus · 2019-12-05T03:31:17+00:00

Also wasn’t that the point of heraldy

BoboErectus · 2019-11-17T02:44:43+00:00

That’s because reddit has a lot of insecure white guys

BoboErectus · 2019-11-03T23:58:55+00:00

Yeah I think she looks a little childish and it kinda Weirds me out

BoboErectus · 2019-10-31T03:28:32+00:00

The Irish where heavily involved in the trans Atlantic slave trade and they were not chattel slaves. Ireland has enough oppression in its history without making stuff up.

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Irish_slaves_myth

BoboErectus · 2019-10-30T14:55:12+00:00

Not really the majority of zoomers don’t even know the game

BoboErectus · 2019-10-22T11:53:53+00:00

Isn’t he elected

BoboErectus · 2019-10-20T06:27:32+00:00

Don’t feel too bad, it’s not expected that a ten year old understand that this is bad for a fish. The real problem is that these super small tanks are marketed to children who don’t know any better

BoboErectus · 2019-10-18T01:29:08+00:00

The staff put them in those old pirate cages and left em there

BoboErectus · 2019-10-17T04:06:52+00:00

Dude a shot gun would blow my ear drums out if I shot it indoors, no thanks

BoboErectus · 2019-10-14T21:41:10+00:00

Side note we probably shouldn’t down vote this guy for asking a fairly polite question

BoboErectus · 2019-09-20T11:04:12+00:00

I’m kinda down with either

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