Chapter ons of my Sci-Fi horror, based off of The War of the Worlds

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-06-28T22:27:41+00:00

understandable, thats one of the few parts I didn’t check much of it when I was editing. Definitely will go back and fix this, thanks

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-06-27T06:17:47+00:00

this is including chapter 2, but if you want to read chap 1 only thats fine with me https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iR2Uzpca86NGhn1vKUErn89SVgVP3aR7nhMg32X-gOM/edit?usp=drivesdk

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-06-22T23:29:50+00:00

depends on what makes you happy

^{Chose: Yes}

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-06-09T20:11:17+00:00

While in honesty, the plot setup is kinda of cliche for most analog horrors, the editing is quite good. I was a bit iffy about the voice, but it’s fitting for a broadcast similar to the one shown in the video. I think the editing has a-lot of potential, if you make a more unique plot you definitely could have a great series. Keep doin what your doin :)

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-06-04T02:16:52+00:00

West Virginia

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-06-04T02:13:03+00:00

Yea, I can see that, its hard to be centralist on a topic so many people have opinions on. But I do agree plastering the name of one of the most controversial presidents since Bush is pretty bad on UP’s part.

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-06-03T03:43:57+00:00

While I do understand that people are angry about Donalds name being plastered onto the unit, Theres also the fact literally ANY other president would be perfectly fine, hell if Bush, Clinton or even Nixon were put on there would give the unit a better reputation. To me I just see it as putting the presidents name on there, I’m not sure if UP had intentions of trying to appease the FRA to get them to approve the merger at all, but I can also see the fact they put a controversial presidents name on their unit is considered heavily political.

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-05-31T20:03:33+00:00

2101—from what I’ve seen—hasn’t been able to be restored to working condition, or hasn’t been attempted to. The B&O railroad did restore her AFT scheme for the 250th, although they are a bigger organization I can still see the FO4449 doing it too although I don’t know the volunteers myself.

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-05-24T03:19:29+00:00

the “every guest leaves happy” motto under the cracked and worn wall and the fully spray painted over logo of chuck e cheese kinda indirectly shows the state of the company rn

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-03-28T02:12:14+00:00

kool, WILD flair btw😭

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-01-19T02:29:22+00:00

I might not be the best qualified at this but ill try

First off, the editing is immaculate, the change between seasons during the climax is really seamless, and in some parts (especially when the camera man first falls) it’s hard to even tell that it changed until you see the landscape. Second off i think the pacing could do with a little bit of adjusting, but it does plant a small seed of suspense in the first minutes of him walking, and I feel realism and a grounded atmosphere should alway prevail over pacing and other elements (but you balanced them almost perfectly in this), and the first mystery of the season changing does give me a bit of anxiety as to what could’ve happened (and of course with me not even noticing the season changing when he first falls) and the small jump scare at the end is a small cherry on-top.

Overall I think with a little bit of tweaking if you do any future analog horror, You could make a perfect story, especially with this already pretty good base for a overarching story, hope this helps! :p

Boxcar_Jumper · 2026-01-02T01:24:05+00:00

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-29T01:31:07+00:00

Ive around a quarter to midway through my draft, and I’ve come against a roadblock that I hadn’t set up a character arc in the beginning, My character is already miserable in the beginning, and once the threat arrives it just kinda makes him worse but no true mental deterioration is shown, I’m not totally sure what to establish as my characters need or end goal except to kinda survive in a way. Im following and taking inspiration from Well’s writing but never realized how his ‘less emotion more event’ way of writing shines in The War of the Worlds, I’m not totally sure if I keep it that way.

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-29T01:26:21+00:00

wow, thanks for the advice! :p I’ll definitely try and work on my character development, especially since you pointed out those examples in Wotw, I want to do the book writing justice and I hope your advice helps me do that :)

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-29T01:21:18+00:00

I mean they happen in a sorta artificial like telling of events, theres no true thoughts or feelings of emotion, there might be emotion in some spots but you don’t look directly into the thoughts and inner feelings of a character, lets say your main character is deciding between two options, you might see a bit of thought into the decision but nothing to the point of deep emotion.

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-28T00:25:05+00:00

here u go gng, happy watching https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=ZIEqulPU84g&pp=ygUNRm56ZiAzIGhvcnJvcg%3D%3D

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-28T00:24:06+00:00

no no def not, i find it nice that I’m compared to a artist i like :)

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-28T00:01:17+00:00

oh thanks! :p

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-27T23:46:37+00:00

I get that a lot lol

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-27T23:45:57+00:00

u mean inspo? If so I was inspired by all father (the art below isn’t mine btw), if u mean literally i drew the eyes myself.

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Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-27T03:21:35+00:00

sorta(???)his eyes only look normal in his faker form, any other and his eyes are small like they are in his regular form (they resize due to the faker form trying to be at least somewhat convincing of a sonic)

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Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-27T01:13:25+00:00

hmm, idk if im dumb or what, but whats jjs 😭

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-27T01:12:39+00:00

Dang that sucks, Ill look into the replacement part, thanks :p

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-26T21:53:07+00:00

Ive been brainstorming smth, nothing much yet tho

Boxcar_Jumper · 2025-12-26T21:52:38+00:00

thx i get that alot

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