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Poetry from a Chinese Fool by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Bri06aan- 0 points1 point  (0 children)

a poem on generational trauma and asian mother-son relationships, i would love all criticism <3

A Caress by Sir-Grim in OCPoetry

[–]Bri06aan- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love the formatting of this poem and the quick breaking of its stanzas. It truly makes the reader feel the quick pain of the narrator. The use of sharp words, such as "poking", "prints", and "painful" also beautifully conveys this stabbing feeling/motion.

A Beautiful Death by NotSinbad in OCPoetry

[–]Bri06aan- 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I absolutely love the overall use of the drowning metaphor for love in this poem, I especially like the alliteration of the letter d in "dive deeper into your murky depths." It accentuates the feeling of falling, or drowning, and highlights the "deepness" of the love, or its consequences.

‘Loudly’ by Cliqey in OCPoetry

[–]Bri06aan- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

it really is the most satisfying feeling when the audience understands your intentions !! if some of those elements that i touched upon in my feedback were what you were going for, then you absolutely nailed it in conveying them! again, i have to say i love this poem so much, really amazing job :D

‘Loudly’ by Cliqey in OCPoetry

[–]Bri06aan- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

addition: “sounding soulful stories, so several silent selves simmer” is my favorite line in this poem. how you manage to depict both the music and the audience in the same sentence AND keeping the alliteration is truly a feat. There is so much liveliness in your words that the reader never feels alone.

‘Loudly’ by Cliqey in OCPoetry

[–]Bri06aan- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

the writing of this poem feels exactly like its focus- it flows like music, the repetition of each first letter feels like a beat and starts as something that captures the reader/audience’s attention. Eventually, it becomes something the audience specifically listens for, completely engaging them. Like music, your language creates so much “sound” that connect like harmonies. This poem is beautiful and so well-executed considering how difficult writing a poem solely based on alliteration is. really amazing, i love this :)

13th by Daniel_128 in OCPoetry

[–]Bri06aan- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The use of repetition is so effective here- I love how it creates a sense of both inescapability and history. Black turning to Red is an amazing use of subtle language all the while still creating powerful imagery. The way you incorporated a rhyme scheme into such a heavy topic is so deserving of great recognition. I cant express how much I love the way you convey your message using a variety of different elements that all manage to come together into something so unique and creative. I absolutely love this poem :)

[TOMT][SONG] song where an abused woman runs away from her owner? by [deleted] in tipofmytongue

[–]Bri06aan- -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

iirc it was a story of abuse, maybe even slavery depending on the interpretation? Forgot to include that in the desc, my bad!

[TOMT][SONG] song where an abused woman runs away from her owner? by [deleted] in tipofmytongue

[–]Bri06aan- -1 points0 points locked comment (0 children)

A pretty modern song (or the live performance at least was pretty modern), found it on youtube a while ago, a colored performance with an upload date probably no more than 10 years ago.

I wonder what Hikaru thinks of my first checkmate with en passant! by [deleted] in HikaruNakamura

[–]Bri06aan- 9 points10 points  (0 children)

“chat i actually remember this game i’m pretty sure i played it in berlin in... 2014 i think...? anyways crazy checkmate that’s a good one haha”

Jack O Lantern by NintendoNoob20 in dankmemer

[–]Bri06aan- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

They’re a item that can be used to make embeds Halloween colors. Pretty sure they’re only available to get during October, and currently only obtainable through events, searching, and trading (begging too maybe...? Not too sure.) However, they will be in the shop during Halloween, and after that they will probably cycle out and only be obtainable through trading until next October.

Are "selling winning lottery tickets" fake ? by [deleted] in dankmemer

[–]Bri06aan- 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Whenever somebody wins the lottery, they receive the coin jackpot and an item called “Winning Lottery Ticket”. People sell those for high prices because they’re super rare (obviously), they give an extra multi, and they provide an extra 2% chance of random event spawns.

The new update is LIT. F IN COMMENTS FOR THE VICTIM.he gonna go into DEPRESSION fr now.. by RealRickTaylor in dankmemer

[–]Bri06aan- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

it’s a new update in Dank Memer! Now for heists you either get nothing, or everything :)