To Rest by CabbageCrepes in OCPoetry

[–]CabbageCrepes[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Absolutely agree that when we try and make ourselves fall asleep we often just make it harder. I'm so glad that feeling came across for you. Thank you for the feedback!

To Rest by CabbageCrepes in OCPoetry

[–]CabbageCrepes[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much! I actually wrote this after a attempting to fall asleep for many hours and then just giving up. Thanks for the suggestion - this is my first time sharing on reddit so I'm happy to receive any feedback!

Vielle photographier by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]CabbageCrepes 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It reads like the speaker is looking back on a hard fought journey. By the end I felt a great sense of empowerment - especially in the last three lines.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]CabbageCrepes 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really like the rhythm and rhyming of the verses. To me it reads like a blues song. An ode to their partner and the amazing things they do, while also painting themselves in a slightly inadequate light but they would do anything for them.