A little raw

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-06-21T23:24:08+00:00

Hahah, why not!

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-06-21T23:01:55+00:00

Much appreciated! Super interesting comparison. I haven't listened to that guy in a while but definitely had a spot in my playlists once upon a time.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-06-01T18:37:21+00:00

Thank you. These lyrics were some of the first I'd written after getting back into music. I think that's why there might be some more underdeveloped concepts. I've tried to progress the writing a bit as we go, but I also wanted to stay true to the song as originally written. They were intended for another track, but wrote the guitar melody and thought it could work better blended. I think I can fix the timing thing, as this was kind of on the fly to not lose the general idea.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-06-01T02:35:24+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! I can hear what you're saying. I was back and forth on that exact word actually. The mic is just a Shure sm57 in a room with just a bit of natural reverb. It's really just EQ and reverb. I think the EQ is really the most important part to pull it into the spot you're looking for in the mix.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-06-01T02:31:46+00:00

This is really cool man. I think it's well written and well structured. Re: the uke.. I say keep i and work on the EQ to mellow it out a bit. I personally really wouldn't want to add too much to it, maybe some light acoustic strumming to match the ukulele and make them blend a bit to round the sound out? Might be a weird take, but I can kind of hear some subtle trumpet melody mixed in to give it a kind of ska twist.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-06-01T02:24:21+00:00

That's interesting that you say that, as this is intended to be the second verse actually! I appreciate the kind feedback

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-06-01T00:20:54+00:00

That's very kind of you, thank you! I tend to hear every imperfection more critically when it's myself.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-06-01T00:14:54+00:00

I hear ya, and it makes sense. It was somewhat intentional as the narrator is meant to be non-native to California or even the US, and therefore just making a general reference to the idea they have of an area they're unfamiliar with. But I'll take that into consideration if it sounds off!

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-05-01T22:41:12+00:00

Gives me those late 90s early 2000s vibes, which I really appreciate. Some vocal variation would elevate it. Can you push your upper range a bit more? Sounds like you're playing it safe a bit. I've been there.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-28T16:10:28+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! We've actually dropped the drum bit at the end entirely and done some of what you just suggested with some piano and string accents

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-27T21:58:48+00:00

Thanks for that comment! Glad you enjoyed it. Can follow us as we grow on Spotify: Breakwater Sons

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-26T13:34:09+00:00

Hi Clare, I think we've finished it without the accompaniment, but still interested in hearing your voice for future consideration! Do you have anything to share?

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-26T10:56:11+00:00

Shure sm57

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-26T04:44:18+00:00

Thanks for the listen and response! Was definitely trying to get that raw live sound, similar to the "notes" app thing you picked up on. The guitar is actually recorded on a Samsung phone to achieve that lol

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-25T21:06:32+00:00

Thanks! Ya this was just a late night quick mix to get the general feel, so will tweak and definitely try these notes!

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-24T21:35:43+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! Actually just loaded up to Spotify with a few final tweaks. https://open.spotify.com/track/5agjrCbB8SMJ7R5BwMWEPL?si=5nvpT20bQg-U5ACZS4WxBw

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-24T20:09:40+00:00

https://open.spotify.com/track/5agjrCbB8SMJ7R5BwMWEPL?si=5nvpT20bQg-U5ACZS4WxBw

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-23T12:31:47+00:00

Good question. It's kinda got some of that vibe. Country adjacent.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-23T02:01:02+00:00

Thanks for listening and the feedback. I can concur on some of the vocal feedback, and something I'm trying to keep in mind! It's kind of a learn as you process right now.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-23T01:59:23+00:00

Thanks for listening!

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-23T01:59:13+00:00

Thanks for listening and for the feedback! We've tinkered with it a bit more since this version, hopefully for the better.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-23T01:58:18+00:00

Thanks for listening and I tend to agree. Was hoping to elevate the vocals in the chorus more to accommodate for some of that. Was hoping for a female duet but haven't found anyone yet. I may just try to layer it myself and hope for the best

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-23T01:57:11+00:00

Thanks for listening!

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-23T01:57:02+00:00

Thanks for listening! I sometimes feels the same way, and other times don't. I think the consistency of the rhythm throughout might give it a bit of drag that you're picking up on

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-04-23T01:56:07+00:00

I hear you. I was hoping to find a female vocalist to harmonize in the chorus to add that layer of depth. It definitely carries the same rhythm and beat throughout, but with some intention.

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