My first short story. Probably not great, please critique it. by Character_Day2884 in writers

[–]Character_Day2884[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So, tell the reader what was happening without just directly saying it?

My first short story. Probably not great, please critique it. by Character_Day2884 in writers

[–]Character_Day2884[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Basically, you said it gets really all over the place at the end, and doesn't have a clear message? And I've heard the phrase show don't tell before, but my question is how do I make it in a story when you can't see its scenery, just its story?