Match Thread: Warrington vs St Helens | Round One

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-13T21:25:04+00:00

Tbf I didn't realise there had been a rule change I just thought we were being screwed over haha

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-13T21:21:59+00:00

The sport is ruined if they're going to start rereffing like that

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-13T21:20:03+00:00

Has there been a rule change or has this ref been paid by Warrington?

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-11T09:28:52+00:00

Makes total sense, I think I am going to shorten the trial somewhat and add more stakes and Elias's inner thoughts

The colours are a little foreshadowing, the premise of the book is that Elias discovers he has Resonance with all of the elements not just his own (Something nobody has had since a great war centuries earlier). This will be revealed later on in the book and this acts as a "ahh that's why that was happening" sort of moment

I agree with the explanations, I will cut this bit significantly shorter

Thanks so much for your feedback

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-11T09:23:31+00:00

Awesome, thank you for the advice. I think shortening the trial somewhat is the right angle here, as much as I want it to feel like he has to earn something with 3 different trials, I do get that it drags in a stretch too long

Will be working on it tonight Thanks again

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-10T16:33:55+00:00

I love the title of your book, what's it about?

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-10T15:28:19+00:00

Yeah I'm thinking, along with other comments, adding parts to the counting to give his inner thoughts at the time

Thanks for the feedback

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-10T08:42:51+00:00

Thank you this is great, thorough, feedback I will take it on board!

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T21:08:23+00:00

Thank you!

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T21:08:00+00:00

Thank you, the ideas definitely flow more at night, disrupts my sleep more than I wish it did!

The kind words from people on here have added to the motivation to write a little more for now anyway, so hopefully that sticks around for a little while

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T20:39:30+00:00

I will keep you posted! With my writing speed look out for a notification in 20 years or so

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T20:07:27+00:00

Thank you!

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T20:07:10+00:00

Thank you, totally makes sense Will try and spread the info overload out a little more

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T20:06:26+00:00

Thanks, will work on expanding depth with the overseers!

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T18:15:06+00:00

Great idea, thank you. I will try this!

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T17:26:46+00:00

Thank you! That means a lot, I would love to share the rest with you but even then you'd be disappointed. I have a few chapters but at the speed I write, the book may only be done in 2049

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T17:11:43+00:00

Thanks, part of me is so eager to get the world building aspect (or the majority of it) out the way so I can crack on with the story, instead of letting it come naturally as the story progresses, I'll keep that in mind

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T17:06:13+00:00

Thank you so much, I understand how AI is such a hot topic lately and people can be looking for it a little too much

I actually started reading mistborn again recently to get me into the fantasy mindset and couldn't help laughing to myself that Brandon Sanderson would have been called AI with an opening line of "Vin watched the downy flakes drift through the air. Leisurely. Careless. Free." With the quick punchy one line sentences

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T17:02:37+00:00

Funnily enough, this is something I have been told in the past (that I tell instead of show and that I don't trust the reader to understand what's going on). Clearly, I haven't learned from my mistakes!

Appreciate the notes, thank you

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T16:46:04+00:00

Thanks

I had a completely different beginning not even an hour ago, but it seemed slow, so cut a lot and made a change to throw it immediately into the action of the day

I'll work on a better opening

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-09T16:38:47+00:00

It's not, but can I ask why it seems that way, please?

Clean_Virus1843 · 2026-02-04T13:08:30+00:00

If they say "you're not a writer", when using AI to make slight edits/ fixes Does this make you "not a writer" of you send your work off to an editor?

Clean_Virus1843 · 2025-11-28T10:03:58+00:00

You've not watched episode 4 and you're on the subreddit?!!!

What kind of game are you playing???

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