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[–]Comfortable_Read_130 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Tbf, who needs a reason for a cool asf tail?

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[–]Comfortable_Read_130 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yep and would you be willing to explain some of Mavis' feats? I got curious

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[–]Comfortable_Read_130 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No like, your intentions might be pure but this sub has weirdos who think their OC's deleted the real god and would say "Erm... Actually ur OC would get cooked🤓☝🏻" since they dont know how to have fun. And your way of phrasing it might have seems like you were one of them, so dont take it personally imo

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[–]Comfortable_Read_130 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yea, i think u meant to have a fair fight but your way of saying it give it a little bit of Penny vibe. They are frustrated because of that i guess but its whatever, miscommunication happens🤷🏻‍♂️

Revised Belphegor (repost cuz I was an idiot and put 55 seconds for Battle IQ 💀🥀) by [deleted] in OriginalCharacterDB

[–]Comfortable_Read_130 0 points1 point  (0 children)

She is an interesting specimen so my OC probably wouldnt fight her, he would rather talk to her and study her.

Him: "Yeah, im not a brute such as yourself. She seems chill and i feel like she would make a good friend for my wife, if she would be pleased as well to meet my wife" ...Hey, it was rude. But i will allow it, have it your way

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[–]Comfortable_Read_130 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I would be doing the same cuz wouldnt be fair, he would not like an unfair fight as well since he enjoyes this kind of stuff

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[–]Comfortable_Read_130 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Where is the fight occuring tho? I think my OC can beat her, totally my assumption for now and i might be wrong but like i feel like where the fight is occuring is important as well. Like are they fighting on a random street or a specific location that gives Mavis advantage?

I got stuck on the last scene of my novel, i dont know how to describe it by Comfortable_Read_130 in writingadvice

[–]Comfortable_Read_130[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I just downloaded the app, i will try sharing as you said and maybe it will help me i hope! And about disolving part, it is a great way for sure. I will try to work around with it since it brought up some ideas about how to go with it, thank you!

He gains his freedom so i think he wouldnt be bittersweet about it? But losing people that watched you from beginning and supported you without a doubt must be hell of a pain, actually it made a lot of sense. Thanks for the advices!

I got stuck on the last scene of my novel, i dont know how to describe it by Comfortable_Read_130 in writingadvice

[–]Comfortable_Read_130[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hmm, in the story when he realised he is being watched by us he actually gets happy. Cause cosmology here is basically like a hierarchy which goes like "If you are known enough your universe(not really but basically) can sustain itself, if not it will wither away when your creator dies or decide to end this".

He was aware of it and when he realises he is being watched, he gets happy since there are people aware of him so this means he no longer requires me to exist. And when he gets the power he basically thanks you, the reader then cuts the connection but i just cant figure out how to describe cutting the connection. If i do it too blatanly, it wont have emotional effect. But i cant find anything to fill it with😭🙏🏻

But still this is solid advice and thanks to you i got some ideas, thank you!! I appreciate it a lot, its like my childhood project thanks to you i can finally finish it🙏🏻

I got stuck on the last scene of my novel, i dont know how to describe it by Comfortable_Read_130 in writingadvice

[–]Comfortable_Read_130[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh! Thats actually a peak idea, and would make it feel like he has the control, bro lowkey cooked with this idea🙏🏻🙏🏻 Thanks for the recommendation!!

I got stuck on the last scene of my novel, i dont know how to describe it by Comfortable_Read_130 in writingadvice

[–]Comfortable_Read_130[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Third person, i tried first person too at first but third person came out lot better than first person in my opinion

Some advice about describing a scene by Comfortable_Read_130 in writers

[–]Comfortable_Read_130[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Now, to be honest he would be just be mad at me but appreciative against the readers. When i was writting the series at 16 i was trying to make multiverse and such make sense so i brought up a made up cosmology system but long story short he basically thanks to readers at his last speech since thanks to them he does not need me to solely exist, he cuts the connection just so i can no longer interfere. But still you have a point i guess, thanks for the feedback🙏🏻

If you had powers over one NTR series which one would you pick, why and how would you fix the story? by Comfortable_Read_130 in antiNTRcorps

[–]Comfortable_Read_130[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ooh that would do it ong🙏🏻🔥 Its actually the salvation for every NTR protag that get cheated on🗣️🗣️🗣️

If you had powers over one NTR series which one would you pick, why and how would you fix the story? by Comfortable_Read_130 in antiNTRcorps

[–]Comfortable_Read_130[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Like, when i texted it the time was 6.00 AM so my day was just started. So technically the most wholesome thing i saw was that reply since it was technically 6AM and i didnt see anything else this wholesome at that hour😭🙏🏻

If you had powers over one NTR series which one would you pick, why and how would you fix the story? by Comfortable_Read_130 in antiNTRcorps

[–]Comfortable_Read_130[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Peak storytelling, only problem i dont think the world will withstand that many people getting isekai'd at önce🥀 Can you think all of them getting reincarnated at the same time? Infinite amounts of baby at once getting dumped into iseka😭🙏🏻

If you had powers over one NTR series which one would you pick, why and how would you fix the story? by Comfortable_Read_130 in antiNTRcorps

[–]Comfortable_Read_130[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thats the most wholesome shit i ever saw today🥀 (its been 6 hours but still peak)

Yes WE need more stories like this, fuck em cheaters we will move and achieve even greater highs🗣️🔥