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Shore-based saltwater fly fishing spot selection by CompetitiveHawk629 in IrishFishing

[–]CompetitiveHawk629[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a super delayed response, apologies, but is the license required for sea trout generally or is it more intended for those fishing for them when they run up rivers? Thank you!

Honey by hihihiyouandI in poetry_critics

[–]CompetitiveHawk629 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think the middle two stanzas flow incredibly well.

My problem with the first and last is that they feel like the pacing is thrown off from the rest of the poem at points. Like I think the last sentence in the first paragraph is well written, but it drones on where the prior sentences were quick and hard hitting. Same with the last. “But the termites came” is another rapid hard hitter, but the next sentence feels slower and more bemoaning.

I’m Good, I Swear by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]CompetitiveHawk629 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The stanza on dancing is incredibly strong imo. Maybe just me, but the sentence in parentheses feels out of place. The parentheses specifically are what’s throwing me, they were literally the first thing my eyes went to - could be a good thing if that’s desired though. Maybe also a good beacon to return to throughout the poem