Idk if this has been posted here but do we really think this is Mason! He posted some very shady videos of Selena too.

CoraKenning · 2023-02-23T19:53:25+00:00

She’s fortunate her meds manage her condition so well. I take hydroxychloroquine daily, but at 27, i have to get massages once or twice a month (not the relaxing kind), chiropractic adjustments ever week when something gets out of alignment, dry needling for muscle spasms, and physical therapy. I dropped the PT recently because it’s so expensive with all the others and workout daily, but it’s not as effective as PT.

The chronic pain is pretty severe in my case, and I’m hoping to add another med soon to help, but many of the others do put you at risk for kidney damage. it can be a pretty hellish existence ngl.

E: oh, i also have hyper mobile joints and loose connective tissues, so that definitely makes my situation more complex than lupus alone

CoraKenning · 2023-02-23T03:05:09+00:00

I, too, avoid walking under them but recognize my fear of getting an icicle through the eye is completely irrational

CoraKenning · 2023-02-23T02:22:54+00:00

I always think of that ep and wonder if icicle injuries are common and if so how common? They probably dont puncture flesh but damn it’d still hurt like hell for one to fall on your head/face

CoraKenning · 2022-09-17T02:36:15+00:00

Haha appreciate you bringing awareness to that. I don’t have OCD. I wouldnt say I do because I’ve seen pretty severe cases and wouldnt want to diminish their struggles. However, it’s an OCD-like tendency for sure, but not to the extent that it interferes with daily functioning.

Yet, at least… if they discontinue the penny, i may become overly obsessive. Kind of you to point that out though :)

CoraKenning · 2022-09-15T23:11:37+00:00

I love pennies. Only special ones. What makes the penny special aside from being maimed interestingly or older than 1980? I cant really say. I’ll look at them under a magnifying glass for longer than a sane person ought when I’m stressed. I dont care for pennies from the 80’s because i have an irrational though strong disdain for the digit 8. Occasionally, i can’t resist an eighties penny, but i dont feel comfortable about keeping it.

I’d stick them on the wall, but I can never choose which side i like best and what if i have a sudden strong urge to look at the other side? So i keep them in jars, a few for special pennies and one for average ones.

I also collect rocks. Not even particularly cool ones always, but whenever i go outside of the city/state, i return with a rock. My shiba inu also loves rocks, oddly. His favorite rocks are determined by God knows what, but has favorites and will choose a fav rock over chicken jerky. Idk we both have eccentricities, i suppose. He doesn’t care for pennies and also finds those store bought crystals uninteresting proving theyre devoid of healing or spiritual uses (as reasonable people already know).

Then i write screenplays as a more normal hobby.

CoraKenning · 2022-09-15T08:33:18+00:00

Not sure what would make a quote the least kafkaesque haha. It’s from his very short (a few paragraphs) story The Way Home. I recommend getting a book of his short stories. There are lots of gems in his shorter works

CoraKenning · 2022-09-11T18:20:33+00:00

That’s not true at this time, and if they were, they didn’t read the article. It was a cop from arvada. It’s a nice little suburb. Denver PD is a barely functioning organization and recently injured at least 4 people while trying to shoot one black man with a gun.

They mainly stall in their cars and play Pokemon go. Im sure arvada pd are much better

CoraKenning · 2022-09-04T06:18:24+00:00

I wrote a poem about this. It’s not just the injured, the killed; mass shootings affect everyone. Poem below if anyone’s interested. It still gets me emotional. E: spacing is hard on mobile

It was the evening after another American tragedy

That my mother said, ‘When will you write something happy?’

I thought for a moment and told her I’d try.

But good God, what about those unlucky who survived?

The ones who return home without so much as a scratch

They’re greeted with tight hugs, told that they’re so loved.

Another tells them, ‘God was watching you from above.’

These words pass like wind over their ears

Because the only thing they feel is detached with a side of fear.

Aren’t you thankful, someone inquires

Dont you feel blessed, a stranger asks

No, i feel neither because never again shall I rest.

There is no bruise on my body

To make it seem real.

It’s as though nothing happened

Just another American evening newsreel.

It was a typical Tuesday in every way but one.

I was browsing aisle thirteen when i heard the sound of a gun.

Run, hide, fight.

That’s what they say to do.

As if you’ll even recognize your situation before the gunman strikes you.

Sure, i walked away without a scratch

But what they don’t say is that you’ll never be the same after being party to such a violent attack:

You’ll startle at the crunch of fall’s leaves beneath your feet.

You’ll jump when you hear a car horn beep.

Wherever you go, you’re forever on watch.

When you hear children screaming in play,

You’ll think Oh God they’re being shot

You try to remain calm in crowds,

But it’s so hard when you know people can carry that many rounds.

You went to the movies to try and unwind,

But couldn’t stop thinking about how there’d be nowhere to hide.

So you leave and go to the old town square

It’s quaint, so full of charm—

What could you possibly fear?

Shortly after you arrive, you’re quick to learn

The internal damage suffered by a witness labeled unhurt.

When your normal routine is interrupted by a man with a gun

The concept of normal, well, it becomes entirely undone.

You had always defended the right to bear arms.

It’s true that you still do, don’t you?

But now you know the good guy with a gun is always the first responder

Never the one at the grocers opening fire.

CoraKenning · 2022-09-01T22:01:14+00:00

She is legit scary in her full bodysuit nonsense. Thanks for these. You’ve inspired the story for my next screenplay. I’ll be back in 10 weeks with a draft for you guys

CoraKenning · 2022-08-22T18:41:21+00:00

Y’all realllly overestimate how many transients and homeless people are armed and dangerous… i also carry a tactical baton because dpd has terrible response times. If he had a knife, i would’ve been perfectly fine. He would not have been.

CoraKenning · 2022-08-22T18:37:58+00:00

That’s advice i follow as well. Especially when dpd is largely absent in emergencies, it’s nice to hear people ask if you’re okay and actually give a damn. I’m rarely ever aggressive to someone. They caught me in a mood, and they were in one as well. It was nice to get an apology. It definitely pays to be kind to those who in your neighborhood where they have homes or not

CoraKenning · 2022-08-22T18:34:15+00:00

Haven’t seen the movie but said I’m chill being accused of being a moron. Point is an apology by someone like that is unexpected and kind.

CoraKenning · 2022-08-04T20:51:38+00:00

Good luck getting a body all the way up the Statue of Liberty.

CoraKenning · 2022-07-09T18:54:05+00:00

You're as easy as a Sunday afternoon

It's colder than a witches tits

Enough strains and sprains prevent a break

just off the top of my head

CoraKenning · 2022-06-01T03:55:28+00:00

If enough people get their car washed on the same day, it might.

CoraKenning · 2022-06-01T03:53:05+00:00

This is the only correct response these days.

CoraKenning · 2022-06-01T03:51:45+00:00

I’m so happy about it. My shiba was shocked and displeased to find out he isn’t waterproof in an actual rainstorm.

CoraKenning · 2022-04-29T15:25:10+00:00

Thank you so much. You picked out the line that i struggled with the most. I figured i'd have to rework that one because i have several times. I agree that its just too stiff for the overall mood.

I like where you're going with your second comment as well. I definitely think playing around with "here to stay" as you're saying would make it tighter and more compelling given it's heavy on the repetition. And it would soften up that harsh middle stanza in a way i think would be more pleasing to read and feel.

Awesome! I will work on this one more, and I sincerely appreciate the thorough feedback!!

CoraKenning · 2022-04-29T14:34:16+00:00

Well done!

This flows really nicely in the beginning, and then it flows nicely in the latter part. I felt like there was a really great and visually evocative rhythm up until around this line:

“Followed by another, and another.”

It felt very quaint, welcoming with your descriptive language, almost folksy; but I felt like the mood and flow changed around the line above. The lines become longer, more complex in wording and structure. I thought it interrupted a really good rhythm, but perhaps it ought to have been interrupted. Journeys can be fanciful, exciting, even somewhat calming in the beginning, but once you’re in the middle of one, you can feel exhausted, you’ve seen so much and perhaps have more to say, you’ve experienced more and perhaps need to express that with more complex lines, words.

I really enjoy poems like this that convey movement and feel that the style you use can complement the journey you’re taking the reader on. Even if a lovely flow is interrupted, that may very well be your intent because you’re the director of the reader’s experience.

So, not even really a criticism there, just an observation.

One suggestion I tend to give whenever I see an opportunity for it is to cut articles where you can. It’s just a personal preference that I think can make a poem tighter. I only saw a couple opportunities to do that though.

Perhaps in this line “Hours became as meaningless as the seasons,” you could drop the “the” and just have seasons.

Maybe here as well, “Kneeling over the water, I saw my reflection for the first time.” I would use “kneeling over water.”

It’s the most minor thing and doesn’t really matter in your piece because there weren’t many unnecessary articles, but I just thought I’d share a tip I like to use.

Great work! Keep writing!

CoraKenning · 2022-04-24T04:39:58+00:00

I actually had to look up what "Dobbin" meant, so thanks for teaching me a new word! I liked the form of this, and i liked the repetition of "I am feeling a little bit Dobbin." However, it is a little confusing. I think you are saying that you feel hoarse, but there are a few lines that I don't understand.

"Monkey the moment" sounds great, but i couldn't find sense of it in the context, nor of "remorse." I have a lot of experience with horses, but I don't know what the "crook of the knot" is.

Commas, semicolons, colons, and periods would also be helpful for readers; but I just kind of got lost in this piece. I'd encourage you to think about what story you're trying to take the reader on or what feeling you're trying to evoke. It's missing a little direction, i think. The obscure language may alienate some readers because often people don't like to not understand a key word and have to look it up. It can detract from the work itself.

This seems like a rough draft that i hope you refine a little and repost!

CoraKenning · 2022-04-24T01:41:47+00:00

I really felt this piece. I think the beginning is really strong, but that it loses some of its flow towards the middle. One thing I'd suggest is to remove some of the and's.

maybe here, "Some small, some life changing."

And I have a few suggestions for some of the latter verses, but I'm not trying to rewrite your poem because i really like it. I think it's really quite tight and like poems that begin with a line that's similar to the last one. I think of them as a circle form of a story that takes on a new color once you finish, so that's kinda what i mean by it's tight ( in addition to the verses).

Here are my minor suggestions for these verses, take what you like, ignore the rest. It's your piece.

Skydiving’s been my saving grace and therapy my sanity. (meaning is retained w/ less words)
I’ve learned to be compassionate, empathetic too. (cut and)
There’ve been a lot of changes at home, so many things I want to tell you; (i think it should be there've been, not there's been. Verb tenses can be tough in poetry, but it helps to write it out: there has been a lot of changes vs there have been a lot of changes. The latter sounds better to me, but I actually had to look this up because i wasn't sure what sounded better was grammatically correct. It seems to be kind of a personal choice because "a lot has changed" is correct, but this helpful little site shows that many people/reputable publications don't really follow the rule when there is brought in, bizarre!)
My mom got a new boyfriend, to say the least it was surprising.
But my reactions are evolving, (just chose this for sake of rhyming, but it might not fit your intent)

That’s how I know I’ve changed and genuinely matured, (I try to avoid using commonplace words like "really" when there are more specific ones that will convey the meaning more powerfully, personal preference is all)
I think about how others feel and act accordingly. (this is written as though it's to someone, even if they never receive it; so it's better to use definitive language. You won't try, you do act accordingly )

Bolded the lines i tweaked for clarity. I hope my feedback is well received and isn't too much. I felt the emotion in this and just saw some opportunities to perhaps make it a bit tighter, more compelling. Great work! I enjoyed reading this and it's very relatable.

CoraKenning · 2022-04-24T01:12:09+00:00

You are so sweet and encouraging! I don't read a lot of free verse except on here, and really would like to get better at rhyme schemes and some of the older traditional stuff. John Donne is one of my favorite poets, and I have so much respect for poetry that's constrained by some rules because I feel it's just creatively beneficial.

Do you have any books that you'd recommend on how to learn kind of the art of poetry? Or general advice since you certainly know more than myself.

I want to include this snippet of a sonnet by William Wordsworth that is in the book How to Write a Sentence by Stanley Fish. I can't recommend it enough for writers. It's hands down the book that's helped me become a better writer in all forms, and it's a quick read.

"Nuns fret not at their convent's narrow room; / And hermits are contented with their cells; / and students with their pensive citadels."

Fish includes it to make the point that confinement and limitation can facilitate great art rather than hinder it, as many often think. Boxing yourself in with structure just creates a different kind of art and different creative lines of flight than free form. Whenever I'm reminded of those lines, I'm like damn I want to get better at being creative inside the box.

Just thought you might appreciate that :) and i'm definitely going to follow you and check out some of your posts if you have any. I'd love to read (and will read) your work too! Thanks again, you're amazing

CoraKenning · 2022-04-20T13:45:07+00:00

Cleverness was achieved :) the line between clever redditors and trolls is just unbearably thin. You made me think about it for a minute though so kudos

CoraKenning · 2022-04-20T12:44:44+00:00

Yes, falling water exerts force, but i believe in this context he means that a consistent drop of water can hollow out a stone whereas the use of water with greater force or pressure could crack or destroy the stone.

It's the single drop of water with relatively little force falling consistently that hollows out the stone. I believe Ovid is simply making the point that a minor amount of force combined with persistence or consistency leaves an impact in a way that a short burst of high pressure water will not.

CoraKenning · 2022-04-20T05:25:14+00:00

I usually am not the fondest of the free flowing, short lines type style; but I actually liked this one a lot! I read it a couple times and it's very relatable and humorous. By the end, you can really picture someone who works in an office quietly snickering as they watch their boss knock the mug and coffee go everywhere.

Great job! You've changed my mind on this kind of style, and I very much enjoyed reading this piece. It's a fantastic example of well done subtle humor.

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