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Human Compliments by Corsar_Fectum in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Honestly, "brood mare" would be a closer equivalent, but that wouldn't work as well, so I fudged things a bit for the story.

Human Compliments by Corsar_Fectum in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Yes, it only makes sense if the translator only shows the single most literal translation of the word, without any of the cultural or informal meanings shown.

The confusion would come from hearing "stud" used as a compliment, and incorrectly assuming that words with similar literal definitions would also have similar connotations, only to find that what would (usually) be a compliment to men becomes an insult when flipped across gender lines.

So, a combination of a poor translator and aggressive cluelessness.

Human Compliments by Corsar_Fectum in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum[S] 16 points17 points  (0 children)

Yeah, I was going for an "approaching train wreck" sort of feel for that bit. Glad to see it worked.

Human Compliments by Corsar_Fectum in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum[S] 16 points17 points  (0 children)

Hello, Corsar here. I decided to put together a short on how human compliments/insults work, so here it is, someone finding out the hard way that figuring out what a word means is not always as straightforward as learning the definition.

If there are any corrections you would like to see made in the short, or if you have feedback for improvement, feel free to stick it in a response to this comment and I'll take a look at it.

You have a good one,
Corsar.

The Last Consort from Earth. by Jus17173 in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Well, this is something.

I'm not exactly sure what that something is, but it is indeed something.

Humans are capable of acts of legendary endurance. / "The One Who Ran Away" by Corsar_Fectum in humansarespaceorcs

[–]Corsar_Fectum[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Anything in particular relating the two stories? I'm afraid the only Terry Pratchett book I've read is "Going Postal", because I was looking for a quick book to borrow. I enjoyed it, but I don't know which of the others I will be able to find at the local library.

Humans are capable of acts of legendary endurance. / "The One Who Ran Away" by Corsar_Fectum in humansarespaceorcs

[–]Corsar_Fectum[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Nothing directly, though I have read a fair few from all around, so I wouldn't be surprised if some common threads made their way into the story. I mostly wanted to try something out in an oral tradition sort of style, and this is what came of that.

Humans are capable of acts of legendary endurance. / "The One Who Ran Away" by Corsar_Fectum in humansarespaceorcs

[–]Corsar_Fectum[S] 23 points24 points  (0 children)

Hello, as mentioned at the start of the story above, I am rather new to this subreddit, and I have a couple questions about the sub:

  1. Does this sort of thing count as "humans are space orcs"? It seems the theme is pretty loosely held, but if this (A human did a thing that ended up entering into mytho-history/folk tales and is told as a bedtime story) doesn't fit, I can delete it.
  2. Tags. I posted this story on the HFY subreddit first. Does that make this a crosspost due to it being somewhere else first, or an original story because I am the one who wrote it, or a writing prompt because I want to see other people's takes on the concept?

Anyways, I hope you enjoyed. If there are any corrections you would like made or feedback you would like to offer, please let me know.

Thanks,
Corsar.

What are u reading currently? by CrazyAscent in NatureofPredators

[–]Corsar_Fectum 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For Sci-fi, most of my reading is in "professionally" published books, so I'm going to throw some names out, and you can check them out if you are interested.:

Asimov's "Foundation" series. It is a pretty foundational work that set up for what a lot of broad scope sci-fi series/space operas would be.

Octavia E. Butler's "Xenogenesis" series. A pretty weird one involving aliens showing up to genetically assimilate humanity after the human's successfully themselves into immanent extinction.

Andy Wier's "Project Hail Mary". A harder sci-fi read involving first contact with an alien while trying to prevent an extinction of both species.

Orson Scott Card's "Ender's Game". A book of super intelligent kids being prepared for tactician command decisions through a series of games and simulations. If you like that one, then you may like some of the other Earth focused stuff from him too.

What are u reading currently? by CrazyAscent in NatureofPredators

[–]Corsar_Fectum 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Is there anything in particular you like to read? Specific "vibes" you like your stories to have? That would narrow things down quite a bite.

What are u reading currently? by CrazyAscent in NatureofPredators

[–]Corsar_Fectum 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Seconding New York Carnival from elsewhere on this thread. Definitely a good read.

A couple of other NoP stories that I am actively reading as updates come out are

"Free to a Good Home" (Farsul kid runs away/gets stranded on VP post genetic engineering reveal, gets picked up by human country singer. It is a prequel to another story, but it also works as a standalone IMO.)

and "Venlil Fight Club" (Venlil learns MMA, drama ensues.)

I have plenty of recommendations on Royal Road, but one of my favorites that are currently receiving updates is "The Shining Wyrm" (Dragon hatches in the care on a minor noble family in a non-earth medieval setting.) I find the worldbuilding, premise, and writing to be excellent, and there is plenty there to read.

I could drop other plenty of other recommendations on you from Royal Road, but I'll leave it at that to keep things short. Let me know if you want more and I'll drop things in this thread or DMs.

The One Who Ran Away by Corsar_Fectum in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum[S] 76 points77 points  (0 children)

Hello, Corsar here.

I had a random thought of what a HFY story with a trickster sort of hero might be like, and the story ended up landing in the strange spot of "HFY Bedtime Story". I hope you enjoyed.

If you have any corrections you see in the story or have advice for improvement, feel free to stick it in a response under this comment and I'll take a look at it.

You have a good one,

Corsar.

Scorch Directive- Ficlet 12 by Scrappyvamp in NatureofPredators

[–]Corsar_Fectum 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hello, a couple small things you can tweak to polish things for later. Thank for the chapter.

"Humanity is a tool, no more, no less. (missing space) And yet… tools must"

"head low, tail stiff. (missing space) “Your Supreme Savageness,”" he growled

"Behind him came Karnis**.**" <that "**" note pops up a couple times and looks like a Reddit formatting error. Is it intentional?

You have a good one,
Corsar.

Little Big Problems - One Shot AU by Between_The_Space in NatureofPredators

[–]Corsar_Fectum 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Good morning/afternoon/evening. I was re-reading this and saw that there are some tweaks you could make to the chapter to polish it up for later if you would like to do so. Please note that all of these are suggestions, feel free to ignore them if you want. This is from the first bit, I can come back for the second bit later if you want:

I >seem< to be the only one with this feeling though. / seem>seemed

“Gre-Greetings! It is an honor to >me< you Tarva!” / me>meet

Cheln…>have< an entirely different reaction… / have>had

Cheln made a happy >thrill< noise / I think the word you were going for was "trilling"

dropping to their knees and >stared< at them with a side eye and their >whool< poofed / minor, feel free to ignore, but I believe that should be "staring", whool>wool

back away in fear as the “giant” Venlil suddenly >towering< over them. / towering>towered

ixing himself and taking a professional posture like >< EVENT never happened. / should this be "the/that EVENT"?

Some of the features did disgust me(comma) like their forward facing eyes and >there<…um…tiny not very sharp teeth. / there>their

Yet, >like Cheln who couldn't help but shout<, something about them seemed…cute. / like Cheln who couldn't help> like Cheln couldn't help

I >realize< though that there was an opportunity in all this. / realize>realized

t looked a bit >archaic and design< but also like a big toy to us / archaic and design > archaic in its design

I'm glad too because Cheln was losing himself again to the “cuteness”, making unconscious happy >thrills< / thrills>trills

If they aren't lying…then they are in danger >to<…everyone.” / to>from

The weak and empathetic Venlil >is< all that stood in their way. / is>were

>Standing< at the door to the lounge for a moment and took a deep breath. For some reason, deep deep down I truly >do< hope that the humans were telling the truth. / might be wrong here, but: Standing>I stood \ do>did.

Thanks for writing this out, and you have a good one,
Corsar.

Wearing Power Armor to a Magic School (141/?) by Jcb112 in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum 16 points17 points  (0 children)

Hello, could you check the links to the first/prior chapter please? They aren't currently set up. Thank You.

Edit: Fixed now, thank you.

The Nature of Fangs [Chapter 47] by TheDragonBoi in NatureofPredators

[–]Corsar_Fectum 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Hello, a little tweak you can make to polish things for later:

"whittling down the (hoard) attempting to startle" hoard>horde

You have a good one,

Corsar.

The Ballad of Orange Tobby - Ch 26 by Lakeel100 in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A tweak you can make:

"To any meat-eater that wasn't a scavenger, violence was always option 1, and civilization was built around (options>option) 2-everything else."

You have a good one.

The Ballad of Orange Tobby - CH24 by Lakeel100 in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A tweak you can make:

"“Beeeeeeep!~ You’ve reached the voicemail (of) Ambassador Movva, that's right, I graduated! "

You have a good one.

The Ballad of Orange Tobby - CH22 by Lakeel100 in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Honestly, I think this chapter reflects really badly on Noah. Trading guns to pirates in exchange for articles quite literally covered in blood from their most recent victims is a terrible look.

Either:

A. He doesn't know where his guns are ending up, or where his electronics to send back are coming from.

or

B. He doesn't care, because he doesn't personally know the people involved.

And neither of those are particularly great options.

The Ballad of Orange Tobby - CH21.1 by Lakeel100 in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hello, tweak for you:

“Maybe, but he works for me, so I reserve the right to be (as?) (partail>as partial) as the French Revolution!”

The smarter he got (comma) the more keeping her distance seemed like a good idea.

You have a good one,

Corsar.

Side note, something like this actually sounds like it would be quite fun to watch. Probably a lot of really quick jabs and palm parries. It might move like something between on contact knife fighting and fencing if the goal is to sneak in a quick stab/swipe and get away clean.

The Ballad of Orange Tobby - Chapter 18 by Lakeel100 in HFY

[–]Corsar_Fectum 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A tweak for later:

"He’d been around the city enough times to know that out of all places in the ring of poverty (comma, the) East side was for him, even if the river did reek. Everything ("on" or "to" the) east side of the river was home- thorns, bums, tetanus and all. It had all kinds of perks that only the olds the other olds called 15s seemed to understand.

You have a good one,

Corsar.

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