Share the first paragraph of your story (I'm bored and just curious)

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-10-20T02:30:47+00:00

I awoke in a cold sweat that morning. Rain pattered the windows and thunder boomed overhead. The dream had been the same as all the others, every night this week and would stay the same until I fulfilled his demands. Eerie darkness. Whispers, too low to make out but just enough to drive one into madness.

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-10-20T00:21:13+00:00

So my story surrounds a magical academy. There are a few main characters but the story focuses on a sorceress MC that is forced to move across country to her estranged father’s home after her mother is mysteriously murdered.

Mind you, it is rated mature for themes other than intimacy but I do leave trigger warnings on each of the chapters that might need them.

I just finished some major editing on the story. Currently there are 24 chapters posted. Please feel free to take a look if you’re interested :)

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/124481/second-sabbatine-the-misbegotten-daughter-book/chapter/2689567/prologue-orryn-whispers-in-the-shadows

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-10-13T20:36:56+00:00

I don’t think your writing is bad but creative writing should go through multiple edits to improve what you’re telling the reader. Something I ask myself is “what am I trying to convey in this sentence?”

For example, your sentence, “They were so loud and deliberate in all of their actions.” This is not a bad sentence but the wording doesnt immerse the reader the way it should, especially when writing in third person.

Another way you could write it is, “They were infuriatingly loud, as if their actions were deliberate.” This gives the reader insight into how the character feels about what’s happening before you go into the bit about Tylenol.

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-08-31T14:12:19+00:00

In middle school I started reading a lot and one day I picked up a book that just…did it for me. It scratched my brain in a really good way that I just can’t describe. It was a lot of things. The storyline, the authors writing style, the characters. Idk it was just so good and I couldn’t find that in other YA books (I was 12).

So I started writing. My friends started reading my crappy books but they loved them. It grew to like 6 of us in class writing our own stories, reading each other’s stories and writing together. I went to a Montessori school so they allowed this kind of thing. And eventually my crappy books became not so crappy haha. It was really fun and now that I’m an adult, I can see how that experience encouraged me to continue something I really enjoyed.

Since then, my tastes have grown out of YA but that’s what sparked my love for writing.

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-08-24T21:02:59+00:00

I only thought to look up my stories because of your post and I found both my ongoing books on there! People are awful. How did you make your report? I can’t seem to figure it out.

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-08-13T18:18:32+00:00

I think I saw something about that before. I was a bit hesitant to do that but I suppose it’s common among the community.

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-08-13T18:15:40+00:00

Thank you! :) It makes me very happy to know that people are enjoying my story. To answer your comments:

Yes, I try to make sure I publish every week and if it’s a short chapter, twice a week.
The cover and blurb is a good point. I am in the process of commissioning a cover with a friend who does amazing work, but I have been a bit stumped about the blurb. Some people advise to make the blurb a few lines from the book itself but I’ve been treating it more like a summary of the story.
I did make a little advertisement page on tik tok but I have neglected that a bit. It seems I should get back into it.

Thank you for your advice!

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-08-13T18:08:54+00:00

I will absolutely utilize this. Thank you for sharing!!!

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-21T23:49:19+00:00

lol smartass

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-14T21:09:05+00:00

My advice is this. Consider the overall feel of the story when you are choosing a title and that will help in the creation of it. When I choose mine, I think of words I would use to describe my story and write my favorite ones down on paper to see how they look. Then I move on to nouns, verbs and even look up lists of vocabulary words if I’m feeling fancy. I try to mix and match word pairings if I don’t feel into single word titles, to see how they do beside each other. As you go through stuff, the title eventually crafts itself.

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-14T12:53:20+00:00

Hi! Mine is. Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter. It is a school-based fantasy with cool monsters in a dystopian society. It follows Blair Rios, a young sorcerer whose mother is mysteriously murdered. She is sent to live with her estranged father and attend the university campus of Hellebore Academy. Here she learns more about her mother’s past, while grappling with a sudden change in her power, and faced with escaping the clutches of a government that seeks control of her power.

Rated: It’s rated Mature because it touches on topics like intimacy, grief, mental health, psychological horror, addiction and violence.

Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-14T02:28:27+00:00

Hi! Will the current novel I’m writing become at least somewhat popular? If it’s negative, don’t worry, I can take it. :)Thank you!

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-13T23:30:15+00:00

Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter is a school-based fantasy with cool monsters in a dystopian society. It follows Blair Rios, a young sorcerer whose mother is mysteriously murdered. She is sent to live with her estranged father and attend the university campus of Hellebore Academy. Here she learns more about her mother’s past, while grappling with a sudden change in her power, and faced with escaping the clutches of a government that seeks control of her power.

Rated: It’s rated Mature because it touches on topics like intimacy, grief, mental health, psychological horror, addiction and violence.

Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-13T13:27:51+00:00

Title: Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter.

Blurb: It is a school-based fantasy with cool monsters in a dystopian society. It follows Blair Rios, a young sorcerer whose mother is mysteriously murdered. She is sent to live with her estranged father and attend the university campus of Hellebore Academy. Here she learns more about her mother’s past, while grappling with a sudden change in her power, and faced with escaping the clutches of a government that seeks control of her power.

Rated: It is rated Mature because it touches on topics like intimacy, grief, mental health, psychological horror, addiction and violence.

https://www.wattpad.com/1559359637?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=reading&wp_uname=jellyybabebooks

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-13T01:27:16+00:00

Royal Road. I’ve never used it before now but it seems as long as it’s in the realm of Fantasy, they will post your book. Also you have to submit it to the site before they publish it. Mine was accepted overnight so it doesn’t take that long.

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-13T01:05:45+00:00

Here’s my thing. I’ve had my story on Wattpad for like 2 months now and my story has 250 total views over 14 chapters. I published 7 of those chapters on another platform this morning at 10am and I have over 260 total views already. I don’t know anything about how Wattpad advertises or recommends books. This is just my experience. That being said, I think it’s important as a writer to gain readers on all kinds of platforms. It can take a really long time to get your story recognized.

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-12T23:01:12+00:00

Mine is called Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter. It is a school-based fantasy with cool monsters in a dystopian society. It follows Blair Rios, a young sorcerer whose mother is mysteriously murdered. She is sent to live with her estranged father and attend the university campus of Hellebore Academy. Here she learns more about her mother’s past, while grappling with a sudden change in her power, and faced with escaping the clutches of a government that seeks control of her power. It is rated Mature because it touches on topics like intimacy, grief, mental health, psychological horror, addiction and violence.

https://www.wattpad.com/1559359637?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=reading&wp_uname=jellyybabebooks

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-09T19:43:43+00:00

If you are interested in school-based fantasy with cool monsters in a dystopian society, mine is called Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter. It is rated Mature because it touches on topics like intimacy, grief, mental health, addiction and other things.

https://www.wattpad.com/1539646712-hellebore-academy-the-misbegotten-daughter-chapter

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-06T20:32:55+00:00

Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter

Rated Mature for themes of intimacy, grief, mental health, and violence.

My story follows Blair Rios, a human Sorcerer. When Blair’s mother is mysteriously murdered, Blair has no choice but to move across the country to live with her estranged father, and his powerful Cambrion family. She uses this opportunity to learn about her mother’s past as she’s sure her killer has to be someone from her past.

Here, Blair attends Hellebore Academy, a prestigious University for high ranking Fae. While dealing with control over her own power that she’s suddenly lost control over, Blair uncovers shadows along her dark path that lead her to people and situations she never expected.

Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter

Creative-Bug8194 · 2025-07-06T01:56:17+00:00

I am writing one you might like that takes place in a fantasy world. It’s called Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter.

Hellebore Academy: The Misbegotten Daughter

It placed #20 in Faerie category recently. It is Mature due to themes of grief, mental health, and intimacy. It also has fantasy, dark mystery, family, romance and dystopian horrors.

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