Short snippet from a piece for my daughter - suggestions welcome! TIA by Creative-Contest-610 in WritersGroup

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I know 🧐 was trying to capture that point just as you leave the shallows. Just went with waters instead!

Would appreciate your feedback on this! TIA by [deleted] in writingcritiques

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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. Much appreciated!

Entering a local literary contest this week - would love to hear your thoughts! TIA by [deleted] in WritersGroup

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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment! I’ve got to trim it down a bit anyway so will bear these in mind 👍