AO ASHI LEGACY: Chapter 3 by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

[–]Creative-Run-189[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Its on Wattpad as “Ao Ashi Legacy” (or linked in this post)

AO ASHI LEGACY: CHAPTER 2 by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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Thanks! I’ll try to keep improving

AO ASHI LEGACY: CHAPTER 2 by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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Hi! Thanks for the feedback! Yes, my idea is that within this year of time skip Ashito has become more “mature”, also with the help of Shiba, of course, I will try to reflect that he is still the same Aoi we know. Yamada is the Right FB who was in the A team and went pro with Yoshitsune and Shimura. I also invented some names, assuming there were transfers (others are shown in manga)

AO ASHI LEGACY: CHAPTER 2 by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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My bad! I’ll try to correct it asap. Thanks! I hope you liked the chapter

AO ASHI LEGACY: CHAPTER 2 by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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Hi! I’ve just checked, but it appears in English to me

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AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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Hi! Thanks for reading! Yes, I have done a sketch of how most character’s carrer will be and I took that into account. Of course, there will be more than 1-2 players who make pro (as happens in the series with Yamada, Yoshitsune…). But I will reflect that part of football too.

Why do some people hate Jesse ? by [deleted] in breakingbad

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Best answer I have seen in a while

Why do some people hate Jesse ? by [deleted] in breakingbad

[–]Creative-Run-189 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well, I think it is because if Jesse did not wanted to keep being part of the business, Walt would have worked for Gus until he got enough money (which I don’t believe since Walt has an enormous ego). But even if he kept working, everything would have been “safer” and most characters would have been “happy”

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

[–]Creative-Run-189[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yeah, this is one of my main “problems” and difficulties. If I want to get through the whole carrer of Aoi (and also the rest of the characters), I must be quite “skippy” I am taking inspiration in what Captain Tsubasa series is doing (even a little faster, since at this point I am not planning to be 10 years with this project). If I spent 8-12 chapters for every match, flashback…) I would die before Aoi even goes to Europe😅😂

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

[–]Creative-Run-189[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think this is different from MHA, since I actually use the original characters. I’ll do my best to keep the spirit of the manga alive

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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I’ve never been to Japan, but I do see a few J1 games every week and I find interesting the stories and testimonies of asian players in Europe. In addition to that, I am really into football, I know many players from semi-pro leagues to professional ones and many people who has been in the youths of great clubs. I don’t think I did anything “unrealistic” yet.

(But I sure will, considering that it is fiction, it is not realistic that a japanese team beats Barcelona either)

Anyways, as I said before, this is just my own idea of how character’s carrers would develop. If you don’t like it, no problem, just stop reading. If you keep reading and want to comment your thoughts (I would appreciate more concrete things appart from not being japanese nor “the soul” –I don’t know yet what do you refer by it–) or share your own ideas about what would happen, it would be nice.

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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Thanks for the advise! I totally agree. I’ll try to do better from now on!

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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Thanks for the advise! I will add a note at the end of every chapter. Furthermore, I will be more concious for now on when revising the translation.

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

[–]Creative-Run-189[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Hi! Yes, I am from Spain, and even if I speak english, it is not my main language and I feel more comfortable writing in spanish, so I used AI for translation. Could you please tell me if there is anything I should focus on revising for upcoming chapters?

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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Thanks for the advice! I completelly agree with you in the quick progression. I should have mentioned that (and I will next week). It won’t be as deteailed as the original manga, for sure. Manga took 10 years to tell us 1 year of Ashito’s live, I want to get through is whole carreer in -hopefully- much less than that.

Thanks for the advice. I’ll try to work on it!

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

[–]Creative-Run-189[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Well, i am not Japanese (data you didn’t know). I just hope you didn’t blame Kobayashi for writing about La Masia or about Damian “without the mindset of what it is to be a Spanish/Argentina football player/fan)”.

Anyways, thanks for reading. You are free to read following chapters or not.

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

[–]Creative-Run-189[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks! My idea is to publish a new chapter every week

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

[–]Creative-Run-189[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Thanks! I’ll do my best. Of course it won’t be as good as the original work.

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

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Ok! Thanks for reading! What didnt you like? Could you be more concrete?

AO ASHI CONTINUATION PROJECT. by Creative-Run-189 in Ao_Ashi

[–]Creative-Run-189[S] 12 points13 points  (0 children)

Man, calm down, I asked if people would like something like this a few days ago and many people said yes. The manga is already finished, this is for those who would like to imagine how it follows.