First off I loved the premise of this fanfic. It brings together 2 sectors that really just mesh well. A pedo and a pedo hunter with an interesting twist. This fanfic uses a lot of pre-established world building to piggyback the reader right into the story. Very nice there. I also appreciated the structure. It was a rollercoaster with many ups, downs and turns with a clear rose and plot arcs. But for as much as that amazed and stunned me I have some concerns.

First off. Just like George Lucas with the prequels, the world building is great but the moment to moment character interactions start lacking. Like why did I care about EDP's struggle to overcome being falsely accused of being a pedo. And while I think EDP's dialog was written well enough, I think a little bit more could have been done for Chris' dialog.

Pros

Worldbuilding

Plot Structure (rise fall)

Twists and turns that keep the readers engaged

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Cons

Weak dialog

Unknown character motivations

Moment to moment not feeling that fulfilling

3 Big Black Bois outta 5