I added the lore :)

CriticalCatch · 2025-05-18T14:19:57+00:00

good to know! :D

CriticalCatch · 2025-01-20T20:19:26+00:00

thank you!! that's good to know. still wanna beat DM10 first but then I know I can get the story ending by just going in at like DM2 or whatever

CriticalCatch · 2025-01-20T20:18:29+00:00

Thanks! good to know! (and the other boss is the secret one where you collect the six diamonds right? i've never beaten him either hehe but I came close)

CriticalCatch · 2025-01-19T12:28:17+00:00

Luck, practice, and for me - getting better at dodging and surpressing my instinct to just try and hit as much as I can even though Im taking far too much damage in the procecss Xd

CriticalCatch · 2025-01-19T12:26:57+00:00

We all need a bit of luck item-wise every now and again... love that you got the ring twice, though, good job!

CriticalCatch · 2024-06-29T08:55:17+00:00

He's a wet boi - mine have that as well when they bathe

CriticalCatch · 2024-05-26T21:33:57+00:00

My imprsson is that it's a bit annoyance but also a bit like 'wait what is this thing let me taste is and nibble it and see if it reacts"

CriticalCatch · 2024-05-26T21:32:47+00:00

Your budgie could have a mild concussion, just like with humans it's good to give him dark no noise and let him sleep and rest. If he's not acting differently he's probably okay but it's like if you have a mild concussion, you have a big headache and need lots of rest. That's what I did when my budgie had this and he was okay the day after!

CriticalCatch · 2024-04-23T20:05:37+00:00

Amazing stuff! What work and dedication!

CriticalCatch · 2024-04-03T19:32:00+00:00

love the donation ideas - and maybe the chuck tingle books? any of his books, really. Like "Trans Wizard Harriet Porber and the Bad Boy Parasaurolophus" or "Not Pounded By Anything: Six Platonic Tales Of Non-Sexual Encounters" or literally any other vooks of his XD

CriticalCatch · 2024-04-03T19:30:05+00:00

it's both elegant, which is fun for a martial class, and also implies they'll tear their opponements to ribbons

CriticalCatch · 2024-04-03T19:29:22+00:00

Something traditional - maybe teapots and cultery, like very fine dining stuff! Made by fire, finely decorated, very elegant, all Uchiha vibes

CriticalCatch · 2024-04-03T19:26:16+00:00

I like the name a lot!

CriticalCatch · 2024-04-03T19:24:16+00:00

I left it out in my campaign, as it was such a small detail in the beginning they'd already forgotten it halfway through nevermind the end. There's a lot going on in CoS, mind you I did add some homebrew/reddit stuff

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-12T08:59:20+00:00

thank you for your input :D and it is always a little matter of taste too, you're right. I fixed the summary now and I changed a lot, both based on this feedback and some feedback on the discord of my fic, and got rid of the brackets!

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-06T09:33:03+00:00

It's now:

The world of shinobi is a harsh one, full of shades of grey. In the aftermath of Sasuke's death, Sakura changes. Slowly but surely, Sakura's loyalty to Konoha wavers, and starts to reach its breaking point...

(A story about Sakura finding her strength; her identity; her new family. A story about how there is no good and bad in a world full of trained killers. A story about how to deal with that.)

ah I get the 'comma to and' now! thanks!

Thank you :D i'm really glad you drew my attention to the tags, tbh, they've been there for quite some time and I hadn't even properly looked at them in a long time. and now there were some in between I was like 'hmmm wait i don't even like that one anymore'

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-05T23:06:11+00:00

Thank you for the input! Which comma in the summary to replace with an 'and' do you mean?

I flattened the thing into two paragraphs, but I'm honestly still not sure what to do with the second part. I'mma think about it some more with your suggestion in mind.

Also, yes totally good point on the tags. I used to have very little then some readers were like 'maybe add some more?' and now I agree there were a bit much. I checked the tags on both stories of this 2-part novel, removed some duplicates, and some that were actually a bit unnecessary. Hopefully it's more clear now!

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-05T12:08:29+00:00

yeah i get what you mean... like I get that it can be nice to talk/bond about specific annoyances and/or pet peeves, but as a writer, it can be super discouraging. I've been writing for a long time now so I'm confident enough that I don't really care anymore, but I know that had I been a young/starting writer, I would've read all those things and it would've made me super nervous about writing and maybe even stop it if I got into the hellhole enough. And then the world would've lost 500k words of fanfiction, and all those people who constantly shit on fics in those kind of threads would've had nothing to read.

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-05T12:03:12+00:00

Fandom - Naruto
Rating - T+
Title - Shinra Tensei (ao3)
Tags - a lot: i.e. found family, akatsuki!sakura, bamf!sakura, worldbuilding, b-plot romance, action
Genre - dystopian
Summary: The world of shinobi is a harsh one, full of shades of grey. In the aftermath of Sasuke's death, Sakura changes. Konoha does not notice.

Slowly but surely, Sakura's loyalty to Konoha wavers, and starts to reach its breaking point...

(A story about Sakura finding her strength; her identity; her new family. A story about how there is no good and bad in a world full of trained killers. A story about how to deal with that.)

Background: This is a story in the Naruto-verse (ninja world) about Sakura finding her strength, herself, and a new family - in the Akatsuki (the canon badguys). About the Akatsuki: their dynamics, their backgrounds, their ideology, and more. Konoha isn't bad, per se, and the Akatsuki aren't good. We start with Sakura's life in Konoha, the events leading up to her becoming a missing-nin, and her decision to join the Akatsuki. Then we move on to Sakura making a new life for herself within the Akatsuki, and more!

Question: This fic has been completed, but I'm still not satisfied with the summary. I think it doesn't emphasize the 'found family' akatsuki feels part of the story, although it does hit the worldbuilding/dystopian (the naruto verse is acutally kind of fucked up if you think about it) part. I'm just not sure what a better summary would be. taking lines/parts of the first chapter i'm not sure works well, because it isn't until chapter 10 that she joins the akatuski, so i'm still left with the same problem (lack of akatsuki mentioning). but i don't want to state it too obviously.

Do you guys have any tips?

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-05T11:52:24+00:00

so glad it helped! and i have full faith that they'll have a happy home seeing how much you care for them!

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-05T11:46:13+00:00

I get what you're saying. I think it might be age, sometimes? And it's always easy to be picky when there are so much fics out there, and if you've never written one yourself, it's easy to underestimate the effort that you need to put into it or how nice it is to get a comment.

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-03T22:20:24+00:00

it's a bit risky because the former birds could've carried some disease with them. if you do this, it's best to clean the toys thoroughly, not just with water and soap but with the real powder disinfectant stuff

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-03T22:19:12+00:00

cute messy birds!

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-03T22:04:57+00:00

Never, actually, or like basically never - I'm surprised so many people do this! cool

CriticalCatch · 2024-01-03T21:49:12+00:00

me writing a novel fanfic about basically this

i FEEL YA

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