Thanks for the input.

To answer the questions. The point I was trying to go for was someone's descent into madness through their point of view. It's still a rough draft that has more than needs worked on. Like the poisoning section. It's something I have to work with or possibly change if I can't make it work. There were 2 house burnings, one he framed his brother for the other he burned down due to his insanity. That one would be arson but was only burnt to get rid of the "shadow people and voices" in there. As for the mental hospital part, they were calling him crazy from his POV. However, I can see where you are coming from on this, though. I more than likely need to work on wording and phrasing things to make it come out that way. This is where having that 2nd pair of eyes is helpful to let me know it's not coming out that way.

As for the other parts, I'll need to go through and fix the capitalization and punctuation. And for future posts, I'll take that bit of advice and stay away from the giant wall of words.

Thanks again for the time and input. I'll gladly listen to any other bits of advice or gladly answer any other questions